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Greenlam[ said...
Dec. 17, 2009 at 4:51 pm
i dont think it should be number 1 or 2
leonaj replied...
Jan. 26, 2011 at 4:30 pm
I don't think yooh shud change anything bowt dis poem...It AWSUM ! ! ! ! I enjoy reading it. I read it bowt 50 timez! (;
Greenlamp said...
Dec. 16, 2009 at 3:43 pm
it is suppose to be 5 lines and the pattern is suppose to be aabba not aabbaa
lilywilf replied...
Dec. 16, 2009 at 4:55 pm
It is not modeled after a set beat. It is its own pattern.
CountryGothic replied...
Jan. 29, 2010 at 8:09 am
It may not be the common version of a limerick, but who says it has to be? I like it!
Winter2124 said...
Dec. 16, 2009 at 2:17 pm
It is a awesome poem with lots of rhyme.
Colorful4u This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 16, 2009 at 11:55 am
I love the beat :D
bree_breeThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Apr. 5, 2011 at 12:38 pm
it an amazing piece of work and i enjoyed reading it.
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