Loved One MAG

By Brian C., Abington, MA

     As far as the gypsy’s eye can see

As low as the clouds that touch the trees

The blades of grass, the dying leaves

Love consumes endlessly

Fluttering of the moth’s gentle wings

The woman in the woods that will never sing

A frozen pond in the middle of a dream

Love endures as it seems

Touching all with gentle limbs

Singing a melody of compelling hymns

Curing men that drip with sins

Our journey starts where love begins





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i love this so much!

This is so true. Your great at writing. :)

on Oct. 21 2015 at 1:34 pm
TheDoctor15 BRONZE, Atlanta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
Idk......
Your wildest dreams may become reality.

I love this so much. Amazing!!!!

on Sep. 20 2014 at 2:29 pm
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

Wow. I love this. I'm so glad that this has been published. Congrats! You deserve it. I love this poem, a lot. It has a lot of depth, emotion, peace, love, and you. You put yourself into it, when you wrote your poem. It's just absolutely, amazing and beautiful and wonderful. You have such a talent and greatness in you; and I hope you know that. Thank you, thank you so much for sharing this.

on Mar. 6 2014 at 11:50 am
dreamcatcher77 BRONZE, Congers, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"People change things go wrong but just remember life goes on"

wooww this is SO good!  :) 

on Feb. 12 2014 at 10:57 pm
francheskas SILVER, San Diego, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Either write something worth reading or do something worth writing." -Benjamin Franklin

Wow. It's easy to read and understand yet it's so beautifully structured. Good job!

Sweetypie said...
on Feb. 12 2014 at 4:42 pm
Yes keep writing

on Jan. 28 2014 at 12:38 am
the_real_iron_lady, Escondido, California
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Favorite Quote:
Walking with a friend in the dark is better than walking alone in the dark. - Helen Keller

I love it. I like to read and write sad poems so this was a nice change. It didnt stray too far from my usual but it gave me a taste of the "other side"

Dizzily1997 said...
on Mar. 15 2013 at 10:44 pm
Dizzily1997, Odessa, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"And in that moment, I swear, we were infinite."
-Perks of being a wallflower;Charlie

It's completely wonderfully, amazing.  It sounded like a scene from one of my dreams.  Just Beautiful and heart felt. 

on Jan. 8 2013 at 1:34 pm
KristenNoel ELITE, Mooresville, North Carolina
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I love this so much! It was beautifully written and you are extremely talented!!! Keep it up I loved this so much!!!

on Nov. 25 2012 at 7:27 pm
samasparagus SILVER, Riverside, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"'Good. Illegal is always faster.'"
-Eoin Colfer

this is so sweet.  Also it's extremely well written and has beautiful metaphors and parallels, i love it.

hotty BRONZE said...
on Jan. 30 2012 at 2:40 pm
hotty BRONZE, Nm, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
ello wats up

uh i kind of dont get this poem i mean like really you titled it loved one but i have to admitt it i am kinda jealous cuz i cant write that good you lucky

girlthing said...
on Jan. 21 2012 at 6:58 am
girlthing, Pasay City, Other
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deserves five stars! =)

Tremendous said...
on Dec. 29 2011 at 8:37 am
Very interesting! I really enjoyed reading this. Good job! please consider checking my work out as well!

on Aug. 21 2011 at 9:53 pm
AnythingButOrdinary, Green Sea, South Carolina
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the best ive read today

on Sep. 24 2010 at 10:28 pm
natashajeanne1021 GOLD, Madelia, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
Time is an important thing but it is also the cause of a lot of pain;Some wish for it to go faster while others wish for it to go faster.Then there are those that wish it could just end. So enjoy the time in life you are given and don't worry so much.

totally loved this! keep writing! =)

on Sep. 24 2010 at 9:47 pm
TheCreativeChristian SILVER, Enid, Oklahoma
5 articles 38 photos 33 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I can do all things who Christ who strengthens me." -Philippians 4:13

FANTASTIC!!!

on Sep. 24 2010 at 9:21 am
OkuniTachibana GOLD, Warrensville Heights, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
As the fallen soldier walks up to the gates of heaven to St.Peter he says "another soildier reporting sir ive served my time in hell"

Truely impressive i must say

I can read it all day!!!

 


on May. 15 2010 at 11:38 pm
soccerismylife BRONZE, Norman, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
"praise does nothing for improvement -- only egos"

great poem. its beautiful and has a certain grace, wonderful

on Apr. 23 2010 at 1:37 pm
CountryGothic GOLD, Somersworth, New Hampshire
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Favorite Quote:
"Once something has been said, it cannot be said in other words." -Aristotle

Ummmm...it is good and the rhyme and wording is lovely, however the pattern of a limerick is AABBA. Be it as it may, pretty poem.




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