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Deck of Cards

April 26, 2015
By BoobooBeetle DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
BoobooBeetle DIAMOND, Jacksonville, Florida
74 articles 1 photo 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
“A good novel tells us the truth about its hero; but a bad novel tells us the truth about its author.”
G.K. Chesterton

"And you, you ridiculous people, you expect me to help you."
Denis Johnson


"Pick one, any one."

What a lie people tell you;

Others choose for you.



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on May. 19 2015 at 6:50 pm
Consalvator BRONZE, South Jordan, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"Once you make a decision, the universe conspires to make it happen." - Ralph Waldo Emerson

OH MY GOSH THIS IS SO COOL! You seriously have some awesome haikus. The concept is incredible. :) Keep up the good work!

on May. 17 2015 at 9:57 pm
Nostalgia-abyss BRONZE, Oakhurst, New Jersey
1 article 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
There is no frigate like a book
to take us lands away
Nor any courser
Like a page of prancing poetry
This traverse may the poorest take
Without oppress of toll
How frugal is the chariot
That bears the human soul
-Emily Dickinson

I really enjoyed this poem- I reread it four times! I love the symbolism behind it; not only is it true simply, as in the "magician" already has the trick planned out, it broadcasts a greater call about society. Quite lovely. The idea behind this is fresh and works perfectly with the short format; Maybe play around with the second line a bit, but I would't change 1 or 3.

Beila BRONZE said...
on May. 17 2015 at 7:55 pm
Beila BRONZE, Palo Alto, California
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Favorite Quote:
"The coldest winter I ever spent was a summer in San Francisco." -Mark Twain

I like the idea behind this poem: it sends a thought-provoking message. To take this haiku to the next level, I'd encourage you to play around with word choice. The power of a haiku is to deliver something fresh with each of your limited syllables. "What a lie people tell you" is almost cliche. What kind of figurative language, metaphors, or more unique wording could you use there to really make your haiku sparkle?

NOIZTHIMS GOLD said...
on May. 17 2015 at 6:56 pm
NOIZTHIMS GOLD, South Jordan, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"If your eyes could speak, what... what would they say?" -Max (from "The Book Thief")

for one Haiku you pack a big emotional punch


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