The Night Sky

May 12, 2013
By ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments

An endless, dark void
Shimmering, gleaming diamonds
Cover its surface

The stunning night sky



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on Oct. 27 2013 at 6:52 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
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Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

I'm afraid I have been quite tedious in fulfilling my promise to you. I implore you to excuse this lateness. Now, The Haiku: I loved your imagery. It is indeed breath-taking. Share more poetry.

on Jun. 13 2013 at 5:22 pm
Athena19 SILVER, Central Point, Oregon
5 articles 1 photo 104 comments

Favorite Quote:
'Love people. Cook them tasty food.' -Penzey's Spices

This imagery is awesome!!! 

on May. 31 2013 at 5:16 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Thank you :D

on May. 30 2013 at 4:29 pm
RoyalCorona SILVER, Grand Rapids, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 290 comments

Favorite Quote:
All of us fave failed to match our dream of perfection. I rate us on the basis of our splendid failure to do the impossible. -William Faulkner

Wow! This is a great picture, it makes me love night even more!!

on May. 30 2013 at 9:47 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Thank you :)

on May. 28 2013 at 2:48 pm
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
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Favorite Quote:
“I'd rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I'd rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye's a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example's always clear.” -Edgar Guest

Very interesting. Its good!

on May. 27 2013 at 2:46 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Thank you :) :) 

on May. 27 2013 at 2:46 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Thank you so much :D 

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on May. 26 2013 at 7:13 pm
PhoebeB GOLD, Lexington, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Music expresses that which cannot be said and on which it is impossible to be silent."
-Victor Hugo

My first impression of this poem is that your ideas are incredibly unique! First of all, in line one you describe the sky as being a "dark void" which stands in stark contrast to the popular belief that the sky is a big, happy, open place. That is the first quirk to the poem. Second of all, the mood of the piece drastically changes when you describe the stars and such as being "shimmering and gleaming diamonds." This pretty much immediately projects a courageous, bright sense to the work because, you know- who doesn't like diamonds? Then, the last line in the poem kind of returns the reader to a sort of middle ground... you say "the stunning night sky." I feel that this coda, in a sense, is describing the sky as being not AMMMAZZING but not awful. Therefore, it is a middle ground between the two extremes touched upon in your work. That is what makes this poem so odd (in a good way of course!). You caused the reader to explore the three different perspectives of emotion in only 13 words. So, CONGRATS! Great job on the poem... it's an incredible, short but sweet piece! Write on~!!!

on May. 26 2013 at 5:35 pm
Rebecca.xx BRONZE, Springboro, Ohio
4 articles 3 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I became insane, with long intervals of horrible sanity."
-Edgar Allan Poe
(this summarizes my life)

Rather different, but in a good way. I liked it!

on May. 25 2013 at 4:51 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Thank you :D 

on May. 24 2013 at 8:01 pm
StarlitSunrise DIAMOND, Clemmons, North Carolina
56 articles 0 photos 253 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Blessed are they who see beautiful things in humble places where other people see nothing." ~Camille Pissarro

  I like the symbolism here! I’ve never seen a haiku done with the extra line like that before, but it was very interesting and you made it work well. :)

on May. 21 2013 at 1:34 pm
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
ahahahh thank you :D 

on May. 21 2013 at 1:32 pm
WulffyBoy SILVER, Hubbard, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
"You suck, there's no buts, the whole music industry can lick my nuts"---- Deuce

pretty dang good.

on May. 20 2013 at 3:21 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Dragonsandthree, thank you :) 

on May. 20 2013 at 2:40 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Thank you :D 

on May. 19 2013 at 4:08 pm
Wings10FeetTall GOLD, Myrtle Beach, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
May your words be sharp.
- Christopher Paolini


Nobody's going to wait for you, so do it now.
-Ingrid Michaelson


Broken hearts heal, but never the same.
- Jessica Romo

Idiots rely on luck.
-Sherlock Holmes

I like it. I do however, dislike the way that it was so short. But, like IDani-IBeauty said, I'm also not a big fan of haikus.

on May. 18 2013 at 12:56 am
iDani-iBeauty SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
- Failure Is Only The Opportunity To Begin Again, Only This Time More Wisely
- Henry Ford -

- I Liked It ! I Do Agree With The Other Comments Saying It Ended Abruptly But I Was Never Really A Fan Of Haikus Anyways . I Did Like How You Put So Much Imagery into it . Good Job, Keep Up The Good Work !

on May. 17 2013 at 3:53 pm
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Thank you so much :D

on May. 17 2013 at 3:18 pm
Court901 BRONZE, Magnolia, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 57 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Imagniation is not a talent of some people, but it is the health of every person" -Ralph Waldo Emerson

Really good imagry and description. I'm really bad with haikus but this is really good. The night sky is usually just passed by and not given a second thought, but this really shows the beauty within it.




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