The Nearing Summer

May 3, 2013
By ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
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Awaiting summer
So missed, loved and yearned by me
Dreaming, wishing to

Relax, unwind, have some fun
Laying on the sandy coast
Sun soaking my skin

Fantasizing to
Escape from school, my prison
To approach freedom

Summer Vacation



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on May. 20 2013 at 8:46 pm
Metalhead08 GOLD, Port Republic, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
"I'd rather hate you for everything you are. Than ever love you for something you are not. " FFDP "You're born alone and you die alone" FFDP "I wonder out where you can't see, inside my shell I wait and bleed." Slipknot " If youre 555 then I am 666"

This poem was very well put together! Great job in using the comparison of school like a prison, defiantly makes it come more alive and relatable! Awesome job!

on May. 19 2013 at 3:43 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
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Thank you so much :D

Soccer23 GOLD said...
on May. 18 2013 at 7:17 pm
Soccer23 GOLD, Rockton, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
Being deeply loved by someone gives you strength, while loving someone deeply gives you courage.
Lao Tzu

This is extremly relateable especcially toward the end of the year school definatly feels like a prison! Keep writing in this format because you are amazing at it! 

on May. 17 2013 at 3:52 pm
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
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Thank you :D

on May. 17 2013 at 3:21 pm
Court901 BRONZE, Magnolia, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Imagniation is not a talent of some people, but it is the health of every person" -Ralph Waldo Emerson

I think this poem is really nice and relatable. I think it could flow a bit better, but other than that I like it.

on May. 16 2013 at 4:19 pm
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Thank you so much :D It really means a lot to me that you like it. 

OlveraJorge1 said...
on May. 16 2013 at 10:16 am
YUSS! You actually did it before I commented! Keep writing in this format and your SUPERB writing will get recognized soon enough!  

on May. 15 2013 at 5:38 pm
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
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Thank you :D

Mckay ELITE said...
on May. 15 2013 at 2:43 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

I so feel this way right now. Can't wait to be done with school and just graduate. Oh, summer how I miss you. I love this poem for making want summer to arrive already. And for making me relate to it.

on May. 15 2013 at 4:31 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
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Thank you so much :D 

PhoebeB GOLD said...
on May. 14 2013 at 5:50 pm
PhoebeB GOLD, Lexington, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Music expresses that which cannot be said and on which it is impossible to be silent."
-Victor Hugo

I find this poem really impressive. Apart from the fact that haikus are incredibly hard to write, your poem perfectly encapsulates my feelings about the Summer.

on May. 14 2013 at 4:15 pm
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
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Thank you so much. :D I'm glad you liked it. :D 

on May. 14 2013 at 2:16 pm
Someone2know BRONZE, Council Bluffs, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
Dont let your insecurities ruin the beauty you were born with.(:

Wow! Haikus are trick but you did an incredible Job! :) :)

on May. 14 2013 at 12:56 pm
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
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Thank you so much :D :D

on May. 14 2013 at 12:54 pm
wordnerd54 SILVER, Sparta, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"Writing is a socially acceptable form of schizophrenia." ~E.L. Doctorow

I like this a lot! Haikus are tricky, but you did a really nice job with it - it's definitely unique. The only line I felt like I stumbled over a tiny bit was "Sun soaking my skin." It felt like it lost its flow a little bit - but that's totally me being picky for the sake of improvement. You really captured the feeling everyone gets right before summer vacation. Great job!!

on May. 14 2013 at 3:43 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Thank you :) :)

Kris_10 GOLD said...
on May. 13 2013 at 9:37 pm
Kris_10 GOLD, North Scituate, Rhode Island
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Favorite Quote:
"It is not the critic who counts; not the man who points out how the strong man stumbles... The credit belongs to the man who is actually in the arena, whose face is marred by dust and sweat and blood..." -Theodore Roosevelt

Recently, I've been writing a lot of haiku myself and it helps to read other haikus. I also lik ehow you've touched a more literal side of things. A lot of poetry I read is so deep it almost gets confusing and chiche. This isn't a very deep poem, but it's nice to read such effortless and simple poems sometimes.

on May. 13 2013 at 5:47 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Thank you so much :) 

on May. 13 2013 at 5:46 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Thank you so much :) 

on May. 13 2013 at 5:46 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Thank you :) 


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