The Nearing Summer

May 3, 2013
By ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
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Awaiting summer
So missed, loved and yearned by me
Dreaming, wishing to

Relax, unwind, have some fun
Laying on the sandy coast
Sun soaking my skin

Fantasizing to
Escape from school, my prison
To approach freedom

Summer Vacation



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on Oct. 27 2013 at 6:55 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
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Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

The humour, the imagery, the line " sun soaking my skin" : so vivid. I like the fact that you went for simplicity rather than complexity and that fact makes this poem shine even more. Wonderful work.

on May. 31 2013 at 5:19 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
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Thank you so much :). I will :D

on May. 31 2013 at 5:18 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Thank you, I'm so glad you liked it :)

on May. 31 2013 at 5:17 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
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Thank you so much :)

on May. 30 2013 at 8:41 pm
cassiopeia BRONZE, Winningen, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Logic will get you from A to B. Imagination will take you everywhere. -Albert Einstein.

You managed to capture a lot of emotions in a few lines. Very impressive! This made me want to tan on the beach :) If you have the time, try to write a similar piece about the winter! 

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on May. 30 2013 at 6:35 pm
sarah98 BRONZE, Holyoke, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
It is better to write for yourself and have no audience than write for your audience and have no self.

trueeeeee. this was great

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on May. 26 2013 at 8:46 am
PhoebeB GOLD, Lexington, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Music expresses that which cannot be said and on which it is impossible to be silent."
-Victor Hugo

Loved the poem, once again. I agree with StarlitSunrise, you chose a relatable topic that made your piece easily enjoyable by all different kinds of people. Whereas if you had written an amazing poem about Ice-Cream, a lactose intolerant person may not enjoy the poem as much. Anywho, I'm babbling now, so I'll leave it at that Great poem, and happy writing!

on May. 25 2013 at 4:52 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
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Thank you :D 

on May. 25 2013 at 4:52 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
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I'm so glad that you like it, thank you :D 

on May. 24 2013 at 7:58 pm
StarlitSunrise DIAMOND, Clemmons, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Blessed are they who see beautiful things in humble places where other people see nothing." ~Camille Pissarro

  I like the simple topic that everyone can relate to. :) You broke up the stanzas very nicely as well.

OldYoungOne said...
on May. 24 2013 at 12:05 pm
I can relate to this feeling. I like the flow of it (many don't have the talent to do so) with so simple words.

on May. 24 2013 at 9:58 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
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Thank you :) 

on May. 23 2013 at 8:18 pm
shadowkiss96 SILVER, Selkirk, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"You know you're in love when you can't fall asleep because reality is finally better than your dreams."

cool, nice poem!

on May. 23 2013 at 6:38 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
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Thank you :D 

on May. 22 2013 at 5:00 pm
estucker1998 PLATINUM, Tuscaloosa, Alabama
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Favorite Quote:
The voracious ambition of humans is never sated by dreams coming true, because of the thought that everything may be done better and again. --John Green, The Fault in Our Stars.

Flows really well. Simply put, but so true. We just got out of school today, so I could not've said it better myself! I especially loved "escape from school, my prison" Keep writing! 

on May. 21 2013 at 2:53 pm
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
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Thank you :) 

on May. 21 2013 at 2:28 pm
SimplyErica SILVER, San Marcos, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Love is something unconditional. It continues to live even when everything dies." - By Me ♥

I like this a lot. I feel like it is really soothing to read haha. If that makes sense? Great job! (:

on May. 21 2013 at 1:34 pm
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
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Thank you :) 

on May. 21 2013 at 1:27 pm
WulffyBoy SILVER, Hubbard, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
"You suck, there's no buts, the whole music industry can lick my nuts"---- Deuce

Very nice. Well put together. Good job.

on May. 21 2013 at 4:55 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
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Thank you so much :D 




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