Photograph

May 2, 2013
A precious moment
A sweet, treasured memory
A part of my life

The shimmering sun
The wide grins on our faces
The cloudless, blue sky

An old photo
An irreplaceable thought
Never forgotten





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iDani-iBeauty said...
May 18, 2013 at 12:59 am
- Loved It .. Not One Suggestion . BEAUTIFUL :)
 
Chichot123 replied...
May 18, 2013 at 3:39 am
iDani-iBeauty, Thank you so much :D
 
Court901 said...
May 17, 2013 at 3:23 pm
Really nice poem. It might be better with a bit more length, imagry, and description.
 
Chichot123 replied...
May 17, 2013 at 3:52 pm
Thank you :D
 
Mckay This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 15, 2013 at 2:45 pm
I love the beginning line. And I whole-heartedly agree with the message. Photos are the things—can't find the right word right now—that capture those fleeting moments in life that mean so much to us. Sorry, for taking forever to comment on work. Long week....  
 
Chichot123 replied...
May 15, 2013 at 5:37 pm
Hahaha no problem :D. Thank you
 
PhoebeB said...
May 14, 2013 at 5:52 pm
I love this poem, as well. But, I do agree with Jade.I.Am., the poem could have used a bit more description or imagery. Your poem is absolutely beautiful though! Great job, keep up the great work!!1
 
Chichot123 replied...
May 15, 2013 at 4:32 am
Thank you so much :D 
 
Jade.I.Am This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 14, 2013 at 12:34 pm
This is is cool, but I wish there was more....imagery, or something, idk. Still good tho!! :D
 
Chichot123 replied...
May 14, 2013 at 12:57 pm
Thank you :) 
 
MAriAH.... This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 13, 2013 at 10:38 am
That exactly the way to describe a photograph! I love that. This poems really relateable and short and can be interpreted and imagined in millions of ways! Bravo!
 
Chichot123 replied...
May 13, 2013 at 2:40 pm
Thank you so much :) 
 
laurengerhard This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 12, 2013 at 8:47 pm
Short and sweet... good job.
 
Chichot123 replied...
May 13, 2013 at 5:03 am
Thank you :) 
 
Hanban12 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 12, 2013 at 4:02 pm
Hey! :) loved this poem; it really captures a setting forever enclosed in a photograph. Its short yet full of meaning. I hope you write more poems like this! Word choice was very good and teh imagery is phenomenal. Keep it up :P
 
Chichot123 replied...
May 13, 2013 at 5:03 am
Handban12, thank you very much :). I'm so glad that you like it :D
 
LexusMarie said...
May 9, 2013 at 6:43 pm
Hey there! I actually thought your word choices were well chosen. You used good, nice descriptive words. I am so happy that you chose the word 'grin' over smile. Usually people would go for the word smile, so bravo. I liked this. I think you conveyed this memory, this picture very well. It's pretty and simple. Your descriptions are very clear and visual. Good job!
 
Chichot123 replied...
May 10, 2013 at 6:36 am
Thank you so much :) 
 
Someone2know said...
May 9, 2013 at 2:01 pm
I really like this poem.. It's beautiful.. On thing I wwould maybe look at next time is word choice otherwise I loved it :)
 
Chichot123 replied...
May 9, 2013 at 3:06 pm
Thank you so much for this helpful feedback :) 
 
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