Winter's Song MAG

April 27, 2013
By Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
38 articles 0 photos 445 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light" --Dylan Thomas


cracked, white lips bending
over cups of dark coffee
all the warmth has left


The author's comments:
Thank God Winters Over!!!!! Hello Spring an Summer!

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on Oct. 4 2014 at 1:17 pm
CynthiaFeathers ELITE, Frisco, Texas
125 articles 42 photos 48 comments

Favorite Quote:
He who is bound to a star does not turn back.
Leonardo Di Vinci

You see I'm a bit of a poet, and you did not know it! What!?
~Sir Percy Blakeney

I love the imagery in this poem, It's beautiful.

on Nov. 28 2013 at 2:22 pm
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

HEyyy!!!!!!!! This one! Congratulations :D I do think I commented before and if I didn't say it before (or even if I did I'll say again) : This is one of the best winter poems I've ever read. Make all the faults and flaws of winter seem ever so acceptable and wonderful when held in stark contrast alongside the wonders. P.S. I love the non capitalization. And I AM SO HAPPY LIV. COngatulations again! :D

on Nov. 21 2013 at 11:15 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

Hhahaha yes I CAN :D Well, what can I say, we're just so amazing :P

on Nov. 20 2013 at 6:34 pm
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
38 articles 0 photos 445 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light" --Dylan Thomas

Can you believe that these comments are from May!!!!!!!!! :O    Haha and we still keep talkin (and rockin) Stay awesome <33

Mckay ELITE said...
on Nov. 13 2013 at 9:49 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Congrats, congrats, congrats on the publication. I wish I could share the magazine's pages with you, Ada, and MyApocalyptic—three of my literary sisters. Wonderful writers, all of you. Again, congrats. I'm super happy for you. 

Plume BRONZE said...
on Aug. 20 2013 at 6:20 am
Plume BRONZE, Milano, Other
2 articles 0 photos 31 comments
i love this haiku !!! they are only a few simple words but they seem like so much more !!! great job :)

on Jul. 8 2013 at 7:00 pm
chronosun BRONZE, Movingsomewherenew, Illinois
3 articles 0 photos 22 comments
Short but has a lasting effect. Warmth is felt but not soon after is the cold pervading. I like how the warm part of the poem is inside the poem, literally in the middle. Good poem. 

on Jun. 17 2013 at 4:36 pm
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
35 articles 0 photos 1401 comments

Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.
--Eleanor Roosevelt

So simple--it works. Readers can relate to the feeling of being cole D:)

on May. 21 2013 at 10:58 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
I agree with all of the other comments. This poem is simply amazing, I love it :D. Write on :) 

on May. 21 2013 at 5:44 am
Rebecca.xx BRONZE, Springboro, Ohio
4 articles 3 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I became insane, with long intervals of horrible sanity."
-Edgar Allan Poe
(this summarizes my life)

Great job! This haiku is wonderful, I like how you made winter seem almost dark. I would suggest maybe next time trying to do a haiku on a bit deeper of a subject, but this one is still very good!

on May. 20 2013 at 9:19 am
GuardianoftheStars GOLD, Shongaloo, Louisiana
17 articles 0 photos 495 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Let's tell young people the best books are yet to be written; the best painting, the best government, the best of everything is yet to be done by them."
-John Erslcine

Very nice. It is so hard to write a brilliant peice with so little words, but you did it wonderfully! I could clearly see the imagery and feel winter's sharp bite and the longing for summer! Very nicely done!

Hanban12 ELITE said...
on May. 13 2013 at 6:17 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 633 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

I love this poem because it really brings out so much without saying alot. I love poems like that, and only a few people can really perfect it like u have. What an amazing talent you have- Also, CONGRATS ON THE CHECK MARK! I know its a huuuggee deal and just wanted to let u know tht u deserved it :)

on May. 5 2013 at 11:24 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

Oh you're welcome. I see "Keep rockin" is like your signature... I like it :P Well, seeing as you haven't read much of it yet... I'm overjoyed that you like it already after reading only so little... Love!

on May. 4 2013 at 10:12 pm
Behind_a_Plastic_Smile GOLD, Roseville, California
17 articles 1 photo 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
"if you're not 1st you're last"

i feel the exact same way! and the imagey is just spot on

on May. 4 2013 at 6:33 pm
Carpe-Caffeam GOLD, No Where, Florida
10 articles 0 photos 445 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If it weren’t for the coffee, I’d have no identifiable personality whatsoever.” –David Letterman

Mmmm this haiku makes me yearn for a nice hot cup of black coffee right about now. :) Great job!

on May. 4 2013 at 5:09 pm
Sam_Dawn_Richi SILVER, Augusta, Georgia
9 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life isn't about waiting for the storm to pass. It's about learning dance in the rain." -anonymus

Great Haiku!

on May. 4 2013 at 4:34 pm
Laugh-it-Out PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York, New York
38 articles 0 photos 445 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do not go gentle into that good night. Rage, rage against the dying of the light" --Dylan Thomas

Thanks! No, liv is not my real name, just my teenink name! Love ur stuff too. Haha didn't catch any mistakes! Keep rockin

on May. 4 2013 at 1:58 pm
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

Would you look at all those typos? :P LOL

on May. 4 2013 at 1:57 pm
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

mm-mm.....WOW.... I really do prefer winter but your poem well, the very mention of coffee made me space for a soft spot for summer. This a truly an amazing Haiku.. Well I only just started writing Haiku but this, yours, this is.... I mean truly seems like an expert wrote it. Well, you must be one then.. ... The first line: Great beginning, get's one thinking and the metaphor is pretty tasty, then the second line: well I might've preferred mugs only cause cups gives me a little tea-ish ambiance, but coffee just covers it all, then thrid line: perfect way to top it off... and I love the fact that you used the word "warmth".. Congratulations on the Editor's Choice and looking at the other comments, it looks like people aroung her call you Liv....Is that your first name or a nickname? So anyway Liv, I really like this, can't wait to read more of your work...

on May. 4 2013 at 4:46 am
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
Simple but, amazing :) congrats


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