Dramatic, yet to the point, as haikus are meant to be. Your syllable counting is, of course, spot-on and I like your choice of words. "Collides" give the reader a very powerful mental image. Excellent work!
This is very interesting. Typically, haikus would be about something naturistic on Earth, but you described an action taking place outside of Earth. Nice!
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