Report Abuse Home > Poetry > Haiku > Everlasting Pain Everlasting Pain By babyrex4, Buffalo, NY More by this author It feels like a broken bone That can never heal « Previous article More by this author Next article » September & October Join the Discussion This article has 14 comments. Post your own! Report abuse White_Trash843 said... Feb. 22, 2012 at 9:24 pm: Great Poem Report abuse daph199 said... Feb. 19, 2012 at 5:59 pm: it's cute because it is a haiku. i've read a few of your poems, and my advice would be to try to step a little more out of the box. like here you took a pretty cliche comment and put it to the format of a haiku, making it a little different. so my advice is just stay a lilll more away from the cliche and you'll be fine:) babyrex4 replied... Feb. 19, 2012 at 7:48 pm : Thank you I appreciate your advice. babyrex4 replied... Feb. 19, 2012 at 7:50 pm : I agree with the cliche part about this poem too, but not so much my others. This does lack description and a lot of other things, but I admit its tough to create a 3 line poem. Report abuse britt101 said... Feb. 19, 2012 at 12:49 pm: this is a really good poemi like it babyrex4 replied... Feb. 21, 2012 at 3:55 pm : Thanks! :D Report abuse C.K.Snow said... Feb. 4, 2012 at 1:21 pm: This is very good poem and you describe saddness well. Keep up the good work! babyrex4 replied... Feb. 4, 2012 at 1:26 pm : Thank you, and don't worry I will ;D Report abuse Aaka131 said... Feb. 4, 2012 at 12:05 pm: Short and full of emotion I love it! babyrex4 replied... Feb. 4, 2012 at 1:03 pm : Thank you so much :D! Report abuse MaryEllenCags said... Feb. 2, 2012 at 6:28 pm: I feel your pain from these 17 beautiful syllables. babyrex4 replied... Feb. 4, 2012 at 1:03 pm : Thank you :) Report abuse BrokenBree said... Feb. 1, 2012 at 8:20 pm: Super short. Super beautiful. Love this. babyrex4 replied... Feb. 2, 2012 at 1:33 pm : Thank you so much :).