Everlasting Pain

January 26, 2012
By babyrex4 SILVER, Buffalo, New York
babyrex4 SILVER, Buffalo, New York
5 articles 6 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"You may only be someone in the world, but to someone else, you may be the world.\"

Author Unknown


I was rejected
It feels like a broken bone
That can never heal


The author's comments:
Once again, it comes from the heart. Please, the ones who hurt me, stop.

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Phoenix. said...
on Feb. 22 2012 at 9:24 pm
Phoenix., Pittsfield, Pennsylvania
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Great Poem

on Feb. 21 2012 at 3:55 pm
babyrex4 SILVER, Buffalo, New York
5 articles 6 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"You may only be someone in the world, but to someone else, you may be the world.\"

Author Unknown

Thanks! :D

on Feb. 19 2012 at 7:50 pm
babyrex4 SILVER, Buffalo, New York
5 articles 6 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"You may only be someone in the world, but to someone else, you may be the world.\"

Author Unknown

I agree with the cliche part about this poem too, but not so much my others. This does lack description and a lot of other things, but I admit its tough to create a 3 line poem.

on Feb. 19 2012 at 7:48 pm
babyrex4 SILVER, Buffalo, New York
5 articles 6 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"You may only be someone in the world, but to someone else, you may be the world.\"

Author Unknown

Thank you I appreciate your advice.

daph199 SILVER said...
on Feb. 19 2012 at 5:59 pm
daph199 SILVER, Burlington, New Jersey
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it's cute because it is a haiku. i've read a few of your poems, and my advice would be to try to step a little more out of the box. like here you took a pretty cliche comment and put it to the format of a haiku, making it a little different. so my advice is just stay a lilll more away from the cliche and you'll be fine:)

britt101 said...
on Feb. 19 2012 at 12:49 pm
britt101, Clanton, Alabama
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Favorite Quote:
i can do all things through him who strengthens me

this is a really good poemi like it

on Feb. 4 2012 at 1:26 pm
babyrex4 SILVER, Buffalo, New York
5 articles 6 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"You may only be someone in the world, but to someone else, you may be the world.\"

Author Unknown

Thank you, and don't worry I will ;D

C.K.Snow said...
on Feb. 4 2012 at 1:21 pm
This is very good poem and you describe saddness well. Keep up the good work!

on Feb. 4 2012 at 1:03 pm
babyrex4 SILVER, Buffalo, New York
5 articles 6 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"You may only be someone in the world, but to someone else, you may be the world.\"

Author Unknown

Thank you so much :D!

on Feb. 4 2012 at 1:03 pm
babyrex4 SILVER, Buffalo, New York
5 articles 6 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"You may only be someone in the world, but to someone else, you may be the world.\"

Author Unknown

Thank you :)

Aaka131 SILVER said...
on Feb. 4 2012 at 12:05 pm
Aaka131 SILVER, Dunbar, Pennsylvania
7 articles 0 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be who you are and say what you feel because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind." -Dr. Seuss

Short and full of emotion I love it!

on Feb. 2 2012 at 6:28 pm
MaryEllenCags SILVER, Fanwood, New Jersey
5 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'm not an arsonist. But I am a pyromaniac." -Kieth Richards, Life

I feel your pain from these 17 beautiful syllables.

on Feb. 2 2012 at 1:33 pm
babyrex4 SILVER, Buffalo, New York
5 articles 6 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"You may only be someone in the world, but to someone else, you may be the world.\"

Author Unknown

Thank you so much :).

Loftus GOLD said...
on Feb. 1 2012 at 8:20 pm
Loftus GOLD, Ocoee, Florida
11 articles 1 photo 88 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You have brains in your head. You have feet in your shoes. You can steer yourself any direction you choose. You're on your own, and you know what you know. And you are the one who'll decide where you'll go." -Dr. Seuss

Super short. Super beautiful. Love this.


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