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I was rejected
It feels like a broken bone
That can never heal




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White_Trash843 said...
Feb. 22, 2012 at 9:24 pm:
Great Poem
 
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daph199 said...
Feb. 19, 2012 at 5:59 pm:
it's cute because it is a haiku. i've read a few of your poems, and my advice would be to try to step a little more out of the box. like here you took a pretty cliche comment and put it to the format of a haiku, making it a little different. so my advice is just stay a lilll more away from the cliche and you'll be fine:)
 
babyrex4 replied...
Feb. 19, 2012 at 7:48 pm :
Thank you I appreciate your advice.
 
babyrex4 replied...
Feb. 19, 2012 at 7:50 pm :
I agree with the cliche part about this poem too, but not so much my others. This does lack description and a lot of other things, but I admit its tough to create a 3 line poem.
 
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britt101 said...
Feb. 19, 2012 at 12:49 pm:
this is a really good poemi like it
 
babyrex4 replied...
Feb. 21, 2012 at 3:55 pm :
Thanks! :D
 
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C.K.Snow said...
Feb. 4, 2012 at 1:21 pm:
This is very good poem and you describe saddness well. Keep up the good work!
 
babyrex4 replied...
Feb. 4, 2012 at 1:26 pm :
Thank you, and don't worry I will ;D
 
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Aaka131 said...
Feb. 4, 2012 at 12:05 pm:
Short and full of emotion I love it!
 
babyrex4 replied...
Feb. 4, 2012 at 1:03 pm :
Thank you so much :D!
 
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MaryEllenCags said...
Feb. 2, 2012 at 6:28 pm:
I feel your pain from these 17 beautiful syllables.
 
babyrex4 replied...
Feb. 4, 2012 at 1:03 pm :
Thank you :)
 
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BrokenBree said...
Feb. 1, 2012 at 8:20 pm:
Super short. Super beautiful. Love this.
 
babyrex4 replied...
Feb. 2, 2012 at 1:33 pm :
Thank you so much :).
 
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