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A Cold Chill

Wrapped in Winter
An icy, unblinking stare
I shiver beneath.





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hippiechick99 said...
Apr. 19, 2012 at 3:00 pm
I love how you display the act of being cold. I write haikus sometimes, but their not really my thing... I tend to get a little bound to the sylables instead of the actual poem. Nice work- I loved it.
 
beautifulspirit This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Apr. 20, 2012 at 5:20 am

Cool, thanks~

 

 
Josika.Nav said...
Apr. 8, 2012 at 1:57 am
hey! your language is extremely good. winter is personified so beautifully . great work and keep writing! XD
 
beautifulspirit This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Apr. 8, 2012 at 6:24 am
Cool~ Hey thanks for reading so much of my stuff! I could use some fresh feedback.
 
beautifulspirit This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 18, 2012 at 10:33 am
Thanks for your comment!
 
GreenSerenity said...
Feb. 18, 2012 at 10:05 am
I like the way you describe winter, and your word choice is great. Nice job!
 
Kiki_McGee said...
Feb. 17, 2012 at 1:32 pm
I love how you personified winter. It just gave the poem so much more life.
 
beautifulspirit This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Feb. 18, 2012 at 10:31 am
Thanks---I always pictured winter as some sort of ice queen with a icy personality to match.
 
fluterocker015 said...
Feb. 3, 2012 at 9:41 am
this is really good (:
 
beautifulspirit This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Feb. 3, 2012 at 11:05 am
Thank you again for commenting!
 
JoPepper said...
Jan. 28, 2012 at 2:58 pm
Good job, I really do like it especially the second line! :)
 
beautifulspirit This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 28, 2012 at 4:29 pm
Thank you for commenting~
 
JoPepper replied...
Jan. 29, 2012 at 12:21 pm
No problem! :)
 
JoPepper replied...
Jan. 29, 2012 at 12:22 pm
No problem! (sorry if this posts twice) :) :(
 
SkyyeTrekk replied...
Feb. 3, 2012 at 2:37 pm
yay! This one is much more unique, I really like it :-)
 
beautifulspirit This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Feb. 4, 2012 at 5:02 am
Thanks again! I thought personifying winter would make the poem a little different.
 
loveissmiles replied...
Apr. 2, 2012 at 7:11 am
This is really pretty. I am amazed to find that i like something that has to do with the cold so beautiful. Great job!
 
beautifulspirit This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Apr. 2, 2012 at 7:22 am
Thanks for commenting~ Though I must admit that winter isn't my favorite season, and I was picturing an ice queen staring down at me, daring me to cross her, as I shivered beneath her harsh gaze. Sort of like a master and peasant sort of thing, I guess.
 
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