Watch

September 25, 2011
Watch time fly
And land on your shoulder
Whisper
Watch it go
And wonder
What it knows.





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Imaginedangerous This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 23, 2012 at 4:48 pm
This was really cool. I like how you twisted the expression 'time flies' into some really cool imagery.
 
4qui133 replied...
Jan. 24, 2012 at 7:45 pm
thanks. you wrote a hakiue about a log i really liked :p--the placement of words in the last two lines was brilliant. "I (line break) will probably bite" i think it was. i favorite-d it.
 
qui133 said...
Oct. 14, 2011 at 2:28 pm
note to readers--this isn't really a hakiu, but i couldn't put it as any other type of poem because there are too few words. sorry...:)
 
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