Understand: A Title Within The Poem And At The End

Watermelon breath.
Lake-wet hair, canoeing. Stars,
Moon, marshmallow roasts.

Pizza, pool grass.
Sunflowers, dandelions,
Sun-scent skin, smiles.

Four leaf clovers, no
school, bare feet, freedom. Garden.
Jubilant hand-stands.

SUMMER





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harrypotterlover This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 2, 2012 at 2:33 pm
Beautiful imagery! An innocent description of summer at its best. I particularly appreciate the title...
 
IamtheshyStargirl replied...
Jun. 13, 2012 at 5:54 pm

Gracias, harrypotterlover :)

Why do you particularly appreciate the title?

 
Writer_Jordan said...
Mar. 17, 2012 at 1:14 am
This poem not only sums up my summer, but also brings back good memories...refreshing poem
 
IamtheshyStargirl replied...
Mar. 17, 2012 at 10:39 am
Diola lle, it's always good when something I write invokes personal memories/images in the reader :)
 
Aderes47 said...
Mar. 3, 2012 at 9:05 pm

Perfect!

It's just such a perfetc poem about summer, I love it! :)

When I think of summer, I also think about teen ink and hanging out with you guys. :) ;) :(

 
IamtheshyStargirl replied...
Mar. 5, 2012 at 4:18 pm

It's so great to have you back, Aderes :)

I'm very glad you like my poem, hantale, Adear ;)

 
Aderes47 replied...
Mar. 6, 2012 at 12:10 pm

You are so welcome. :)

So me and Liz are think of being old-school pen pals with Raven. Agreed? By chance, did you find his email? If not, that's Ok!:)

 
IamtheshyStargirl replied...
Mar. 6, 2012 at 4:15 pm

Haha, thanks XD

I can't see either of the comments you speak of, I wonder if they got labeled as spam?... Nope, I guess they just didn't post or something.

 
Aderes47 replied...
Mar. 6, 2012 at 7:29 pm

That's OK. Still haven't answered my question though.  'cause I know you have his address! ;)(blog) 

It's ok if you forgot about the email, don't forget though. Just put in on a sticky-note. :) 

 
IamtheshyStargirl replied...
Mar. 6, 2012 at 8:07 pm
I answered earlier today, let me know that you have it so I can delete the comment :)
 
Aderes47 replied...
Mar. 6, 2012 at 8:33 pm

Got it! Now, go delete it! Right now! ;)

Thanks, you did a BIG favor for me! 

By the way, Are you working on anything new, writing wise? 

 
IamtheshyStargirl replied...
Mar. 6, 2012 at 8:42 pm

Not really :/ I'm working on tons of stuff, though, if you know what I mean ;)

Mostly I just post new poems and stuff on my blog.

 
IceFox416 said...
Oct. 29, 2011 at 3:09 pm

Wow . . . really good! I love the imagery. But I agree with leafy on the fact that the flow could be better. Just the "no" at the end of the first line in the last set is a bit abrupt, but I know haikus are hard. Overall, great job!

4/5

 
IamtheshyStargirl replied...
Oct. 31, 2011 at 4:52 pm

Thanks :)

 

 
leafy This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 19, 2011 at 7:43 am
I love haiku sets, and this one is really good ^_^ the only other thing I will say though is that the flow could be a bit better, but it is harder to do that on haikus. Nice job!
 
IamtheshyStargirl replied...
Oct. 21, 2011 at 5:40 pm

Thanks :)

 

 
Love.Hate.Passion. said...
Oct. 7, 2011 at 10:55 pm

Great description of summer in a cutesy way that made me smile :)

5/5

 
IamtheshyStargirl replied...
Oct. 10, 2011 at 5:11 pm

Always glad to make someone smile :)

Thanks for all of your lovely comments!

 
ChocoMint said...
Oct. 6, 2011 at 3:04 pm
So cute!!!!  I love summer, too, and that is a perfect description!
 
IamtheshyStargirl replied...
Oct. 6, 2011 at 5:37 pm

Thanks, Chocomint :) 

It contains all that Summer means to me.

 
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