Night In The Country

July 28, 2011
The still of black
My ancient little house groans
Under night's pressure

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CarrieAnn13 said...
Aug. 1, 2011 at 5:02 pm
This is great!  My only criticism is that the first line only had four syllables instead of five.
MissColleen replied...
Aug. 1, 2011 at 11:08 pm
 I missed yet another word in my poem. Why do I do this so much? lol The first line is supposed to be: The still of the black
CarrieAnn13 replied...
Aug. 1, 2011 at 11:53 pm
Yeah, if you keep missing words then you definitely need to do a bit more proofreading.  Next time you could try posting on the forums for feedback.  It's always nice to have another set of eyes looking at your work. :)
MissColleen replied...
Aug. 2, 2011 at 10:35 am
Good idea(:
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