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Night In The Country

The still of black
My ancient little house groans
Under night's pressure




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CarrieAnn13This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Aug. 1, 2011 at 5:02 pm:
This is great!  My only criticism is that the first line only had four syllables instead of five.
 
MissColleen replied...
Aug. 1, 2011 at 11:08 pm :
 I missed yet another word in my poem. Why do I do this so much? lol The first line is supposed to be: The still of the black
 
CarrieAnn13This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Aug. 1, 2011 at 11:53 pm :
Yeah, if you keep missing words then you definitely need to do a bit more proofreading.  Next time you could try posting on the forums for feedback.  It's always nice to have another set of eyes looking at your work. :)
 
MissColleen replied...
Aug. 2, 2011 at 10:35 am :
Good idea(:
 
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