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Falling Leaf

Red, yellow, and brown
The leaf comes tumbling down
Hugs the frozen ground



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ohheyyyelli said...
Aug. 2, 2011 at 11:06 am:
Great imagery, I love "hugs the frozen ground"!
 
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CarrieAnn13 said...
Aug. 1, 2011 at 5:07 pm:
This haiku has beautiful imagery, but there's only six syllables instead of seven in the second line.
 
MissColleen replied...
Aug. 1, 2011 at 11:02 pm :
I know it seems like that, but tumbling is supposed to read like tum-ble-ing, not tumb-ling. I'm not sure how to express that though.
 
CarrieAnn13 replied...
Aug. 1, 2011 at 11:51 pm :
I'm not sure either.  That's what made it a bit confusing.
 
MissColleen replied...
Aug. 2, 2011 at 10:31 am :
It is confusing... I might just try to re-work that line so it's better
 
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