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To You From...

I write this and hope
Maybe one day you will hear
The gift is to hear



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sakina said...
Jul. 18, 2011 at 6:41 am:
I do agree with the what the other's are saying...And it's simple..nice:)
 
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booklover04 said...
Jul. 16, 2011 at 2:36 pm:
i like the simplicity the poem has but for a very short poem i think the word "hear" being used twice was an overkill. nice poem though :)
 
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Jul. 16, 2011 at 3:39 pm :

I agree with booklover04. Sometimes when words are repeated, it hits you over the head. However, I think if you changed a few things around, this would be really great. This is my favourite out the stuff you have submitted. :) It's really quite beautiful with it's simplicity.

Maybe if you added some punctuation, the meaning would be a little more clear, and the poem would be easier to understand.

 
YesThatsWhyTheyFly replied...
Jul. 16, 2011 at 5:43 pm :
Thank you, I see what you're saying!
 
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