To You From...

July 4, 2011
By YesThatsWhyTheyFly SILVER, Concord, North Carolina
YesThatsWhyTheyFly SILVER, Concord, North Carolina
5 articles 6 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
'A house divided against itself cannot stand."-Abraham Lincoln


I write this and hope
Maybe one day you will hear
The gift is to hear



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sakina GOLD said...
on Jul. 18 2011 at 6:41 am
sakina GOLD, Chennai, Other
18 articles 13 photos 173 comments

Favorite Quote:
A negative thinker See's a difficulty in every opportunity but a positive thinker sees an opportunity in every difficulty. So always think positive and u'll surely B successful in LIFE.
-Hazrat Ali (A.S)

I do agree with the what the other's are saying...And it's simple..nice:)

on Jul. 16 2011 at 5:43 pm
YesThatsWhyTheyFly SILVER, Concord, North Carolina
5 articles 6 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
'A house divided against itself cannot stand."-Abraham Lincoln

Thank you, I see what you're saying!

on Jul. 16 2011 at 3:39 pm
Uglification GOLD, Catonsville, Maryland
13 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
I want to learn to drive a stick shift, and go so far away that I stop being afraid of not wanting to come back or not being able to find my way back.

I agree with booklover04. Sometimes when words are repeated, it hits you over the head. However, I think if you changed a few things around, this would be really great. This is my favourite out the stuff you have submitted. :) It's really quite beautiful with it's simplicity.

Maybe if you added some punctuation, the meaning would be a little more clear, and the poem would be easier to understand.


firenrain GOLD said...
on Jul. 16 2011 at 2:36 pm
firenrain GOLD, Belle Mead, New Jersey
10 articles 0 photos 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A room without books is like a body without a soul."

- Cicero

Roman author, orator, & politician (106 BC - 43 BC)

i like the simplicity the poem has but for a very short poem i think the word "hear" being used twice was an overkill. nice poem though :)


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