I write this and hope
Maybe one day you will hear
The gift is to hear
Maybe one day you will hear
The gift is to hear
sakina
I do agree with the what the other's are saying...And it's simple..nice:)
booklover04i like the simplicity the poem has but for a very short poem i think the word "hear" being used twice was an overkill. nice poem though :)
Uglification
I agree with booklover04. Sometimes when words are repeated, it hits you over the head. However, I think if you changed a few things around, this would be really great. This is my favourite out the stuff you have submitted. :) It's really quite beautiful with it's simplicity.
Maybe if you added some punctuation, the meaning would be a little more clear, and the poem would be easier to understand.
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