To You From...

July 4, 2011
I write this and hope
Maybe one day you will hear
The gift is to hear

Join the Discussion

This article has 4 comments. Post your own now!

sakina said...
Jul. 18, 2011 at 6:41 am
I do agree with the what the other's are saying...And it's simple..nice:)
booklover04 said...
Jul. 16, 2011 at 2:36 pm
i like the simplicity the poem has but for a very short poem i think the word "hear" being used twice was an overkill. nice poem though :)
Uglification This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jul. 16, 2011 at 3:39 pm

I agree with booklover04. Sometimes when words are repeated, it hits you over the head. However, I think if you changed a few things around, this would be really great. This is my favourite out the stuff you have submitted. :) It's really quite beautiful with it's simplicity.

Maybe if you added some punctuation, the meaning would be a little more clear, and the poem would be easier to understand.

YesThatsWhyTheyFly replied...
Jul. 16, 2011 at 5:43 pm
Thank you, I see what you're saying!
bRealTime banner ad on the left side
Site Feedback