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July 3, 2011
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Garnet77 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 18, 2011 at 5:02 pm
I like this! It's simple, but I like the way you did this. 
Alon_Freevoice said...
Jul. 18, 2011 at 2:57 am
A haiku is of 5-7-5 lines.
Yours is 3-6-8. It's not the typical haiku though but who says you can't make your own style?!

Nice try, though...
Annie.C replied...
Jul. 18, 2011 at 4:12 am
Well... that's a true Japenese haicu... but I've seen many Haicus that aren't that form... just have a total count of 17 syllables...
Alon_Freevoice replied...
Jul. 18, 2011 at 5:13 am
Hey, I didn'y sat it's bad! It's actually good that you're creating your ownn style... :)
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