Fish Pond

June 26, 2011
Orange,Yellow fish
Swimming in my pond of blue
Wandering for food

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stupendousman said...
Sept. 23, 2012 at 12:31 am
i care to disagree. this is a haiku, correct? so there would only be three lines. personally, i like the simplicity of it. it annoys me when people make things too complicated.
Love.Hate.Passion. said...
Dec. 30, 2011 at 6:38 pm
I apologize , first off , because I am about to honestly criticize this. The poem was rather uninteresting and it didn't capture my attention or make me feel anything as a reader it really had no meaning or emotion and seemed like random thoughts strung together. It was okay , but your poetry needs some work. *
DarkenRose replied...
Dec. 31, 2011 at 12:36 pm
Sorry I'm still a beginner at poetry, thank you so much and I'll also work on this poem. Thank you so much again:)
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