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A bird sings softly
Light peeks through barren branches
The woods awaken

A mild frost still thaws
The new buds have yet to bloom
Life begins again

Hurried bees rush by
Lively leaves are abundant
A cardinal rests

The Sun goes colder
Rich hues are ubiquitous
The fox sees his breath

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off-by-oneThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jun. 14, 2011 at 12:41 pm
I think its brilliant!! ^^ Good job!
Kelsey_O replied...
Jun. 14, 2011 at 1:12 pm
Thank you so much! 
dolphinportkey7 said...
Jun. 12, 2011 at 6:20 pm
Try taking out words like "The" or "A" if possible (I understand the syllable structure can be tricky sometimes), it could make it flow just a bit better.
Kelsey_O replied...
Jun. 14, 2011 at 1:13 pm
thanks for the suggestion :)
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