Butterflies of my mind

May 3, 2011
By Justbeme SILVER, Burlington, Washington
Justbeme SILVER, Burlington, Washington
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Flutters of colors
Flying to leaf and flowers
The thoughts in my head


The author's comments:
I randomly came up with this poem hope some of you could give me some feedback

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on Jun. 7 2011 at 12:15 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

You did a great job, it's just that it doesn't really convey emotion, and for all of the imagery, it's very vague.

Keep up the good work, and I'm sure you'll go far, Justberne :)



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