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One shimmering eye
stares at me through the window.
Don’t leave me, sweet moon.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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Wilson1994This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 20 at 7:42 pm:
This is full of meaning, I love the imagery, the sweetness and brightness, yet somehow such intensity, really beautiful.
 
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dia.dreamerThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Aug. 22, 2011 at 8:17 am:
usually I read something twice or thrice before I rate it...I read this once and I rated it 5 immediately...you're a beautiful writer...awesome metaphor and lovely choice of words...love it! btw, check out some of my work too. :)
 
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dark_armor1This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Aug. 16, 2011 at 8:51 pm:
i really like it. good job
 
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dancer_1 said...
Jul. 31, 2011 at 8:28 pm:

i like this poem it is very nice

 

 
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freeflow23This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jun. 12, 2011 at 3:35 pm:
nice metephor
 
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IamtheshyStargirlThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jun. 7, 2011 at 12:18 pm:
Lovely. It definitely deserves its published status.
 
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timeformetofly7This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Feb. 5, 2011 at 9:12 pm:
ooh beautiful word choice. ur a clever one ;)
 
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TheContentedWanderer94 said...
Jan. 14, 2011 at 5:12 pm:
Beautiful! I imagine the moon as an eye also! :D Keep Writing!
 
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MusicBaby21This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Nov. 19, 2010 at 12:00 pm:
Lol ummm yo screen name fye
 
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luvz2read said...
Oct. 25, 2010 at 3:17 pm:
Sob!!!!1 that was soooo beautiful
 
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avantgarde said...
Aug. 11, 2010 at 6:24 pm:
This captures the moment perfectly! I can imagine the whole setting and the story behind the girl/boy of this poem. Great work :)
 
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LastChapter said...
Jul. 10, 2010 at 8:32 pm:
that was beautiful. it totally stood out in the sea of all other haikus. it takes real talent to be able to grab somebody's attention with 17 syllables. keep at it!
 
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BleedingRoseThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
May 17, 2010 at 10:54 am:

I love this, very sweet and powerful.  Keep writing, and would you mind commenting on some of my work?  Thx!  5 stars  ;)

-Rose

 
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BleedingRoseThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
May 17, 2010 at 10:53 am:
What the heck is that?
 
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Ninten1992This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 12, 2010 at 8:13 pm:
Sweet and beautiful.
 
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live.create16 said...
Apr. 3, 2010 at 1:06 pm:
this is beautiful!
 
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Girl-Writer said...
Mar. 27, 2010 at 10:34 pm:
Very nice. A beautiful haiku, personification, and of course a nice array of verbal imagery. I like it. 
 
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munkyman95 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 26, 2010 at 12:07 pm:
This is very good... I love the idea
 
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life_of_a_leaf said...
Jan. 5, 2010 at 3:00 pm:
very creative haiku. i like how you used personification.
 
Mostly_Dead replied...
Jan. 27, 2010 at 7:49 pm :
I'm surprised this was brought as haiku.
 
onelesslonelygirl replied...
Mar. 8, 2010 at 9:23 am :
This kept me thinking for awhile. I love it! It's very creative.
 
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Cheyenne D. said...
Jun. 27, 2009 at 5:41 am:
isnt an amazing thing when something so small could touch a heart so much?
 
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MorningStar15 said...
Mar. 14, 2009 at 1:36 am:
beautiful
 
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summer_rain341 said...
Feb. 1, 2009 at 5:43 pm:
that was beautiful. simple but beautiful!
 
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Marcos said...
Sept. 29, 2008 at 1:38 pm:
easy to understand with simply words
 
Angel C. replied...
Mar. 12, 2010 at 10:06 am :
it was not easy 4 me to understand
 
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Amy said...
Sept. 21, 2008 at 7:34 pm:
Amazing poem, very inspiring. I find it harder to write short poems than long ones. Good job! ^^
 
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Rayne said...
Sept. 17, 2008 at 3:33 pm:
Nice poem. simple, but nice. :) The moon inspires a lot of my poems aswell. Keep up the good POEMS!!!!
 
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harry_potter_fangirl said...
Sept. 17, 2008 at 1:46 am:
wow. simple yet inspiring. good job.
 
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