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Lune MAG

January 24, 2008
By Anonymous

One shimmering eye
stares at me through the window.
Don’t leave me, sweet moon.



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Mike_Tython said...
on May. 14 2018 at 9:53 am
Mike_Tython, Winston-Salem, North Carolina
0 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
I jutht want to conquer people and their soulth.

*through tearth of joy* Thith wath the motht wonderful thing I've ever read

-_- said...
on Mar. 19 2018 at 10:13 am
-_-, New York City, New York
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This haiku gave me a few ideas. Thank you.

on Aug. 30 2012 at 5:55 pm
Under-the-Rain GOLD, Chicago, Illinois
18 articles 5 photos 99 comments

Favorite Quote:
Are you ready to go to battle with your mind?- Written by me :)
Lost the battle, win the war//Bringing my sinking ship back to the shore- Paramore, Now

Sweet Poem. Awesome metaphor and imagery. I LOVED it, definately 5 star worthy! btw check out some of my work too  :)

on Apr. 20 2012 at 7:42 pm
Wilson1994 GOLD, Holywood, Other
10 articles 0 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
'Nothing lasts forever. Forever's a lie. All we have is what's between hello and goodbye.' Unknown

This is full of meaning, I love the imagery, the sweetness and brightness, yet somehow such intensity, really beautiful.

on Aug. 22 2011 at 8:17 am
dia.dreamer GOLD, Kochi, Other
10 articles 0 photos 145 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I saw an angel in the marble and carved until I set him free." - Michelangelo
"I took a deep breath and listened to the old bray of my heart: I am, I am, I am." - Sylvia Plath

usually I read something twice or thrice before I rate it...I read this once and I rated it 5 immediately...you're a beautiful writer...awesome metaphor and lovely choice of words...love it! btw, check out some of my work too. :)

on Aug. 16 2011 at 8:51 pm
Jessi_suarez1 GOLD, Kissimmee, Florida
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i really like it. good job

dancer_1 said...
on Jul. 31 2011 at 8:28 pm
dancer_1, Riversidr, Iowa
0 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
live love and laugh

i like this poem it is very nice

 


on Jun. 12 2011 at 3:35 pm
freeflow23 GOLD, Durham, North Carolina
15 articles 0 photos 96 comments

Favorite Quote:
Saul saw Goliath as too big to kill. David saw he was too big to miss.
W.W.J.D.

nice metephor

on Jun. 7 2011 at 12:18 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Lovely. It definitely deserves its published status.

on Feb. 5 2011 at 9:12 pm
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
1 article 0 photos 1979 comments

Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

ooh beautiful word choice. ur a clever one ;)

on Jan. 14 2011 at 5:12 pm
TheContentedWanderer94 GOLD, Tallahassee, Florida
18 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
Happiness is as a butterfly which, when pursued, is always beyond our grasp, but which if you will sit down quietly, may alight upon you.
- Nathaniel Hawthorne

Beautiful! I imagine the moon as an eye also! :D Keep Writing!

on Nov. 19 2010 at 12:00 pm
MusicBaby21 SILVER, Austell, Georgia
6 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
I rather be 3 hours to soon then a minute to late.

Lol ummm yo screen name fye

luvz2read said...
on Oct. 25 2010 at 3:17 pm
Sob!!!!1 that was soooo beautiful

on Aug. 11 2010 at 6:24 pm
avantgarde GOLD, Stillwater, Minnesota
10 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
I write for the same reason I breathe...because if I didn't I would die. --Isaac Asimov

This captures the moment perfectly! I can imagine the whole setting and the story behind the girl/boy of this poem. Great work :)

LastChapter said...
on Jul. 10 2010 at 8:32 pm
LastChapter, Hempstead, New York
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Favorite Quote:
(couldn't think of anything better at the time) "Take the first step in faith. You don't have to see the whole staircase, just take the first step."-Dr.Martin Luther King Jr.

that was beautiful. it totally stood out in the sea of all other haikus. it takes real talent to be able to grab somebody's attention with 17 syllables. keep at it!

on May. 17 2010 at 10:54 am
BleedingRose PLATINUM, Frederic, Wisconsin
33 articles 1 photo 378 comments

Favorite Quote:
*The darkness holds infinite possibilities.

(mine)

I love this, very sweet and powerful.  Keep writing, and would you mind commenting on some of my work?  Thx!  5 stars  ;)

-Rose


on May. 17 2010 at 10:53 am
BleedingRose PLATINUM, Frederic, Wisconsin
33 articles 1 photo 378 comments

Favorite Quote:
*The darkness holds infinite possibilities.

(mine)

What the heck is that?

on May. 12 2010 at 8:13 pm
Ninten1992 PLATINUM, New York, New York
27 articles 0 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Forgive and Forget".

Sweet and beautiful.

on Apr. 3 2010 at 1:06 pm
live.create16 GOLD, Dedham, Maine
11 articles 4 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
Far away there in the sunshine are my highest aspirations. I may not reach them, but I can look up and see their beauty, believe in them, and try to follow where they lead.
- Louisa May Alcott.

this is beautiful!

Girl-Writer said...
on Mar. 27 2010 at 10:34 pm
Very nice. A beautiful haiku, personification, and of course a nice array of verbal imagery. I like it.