Lune This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

January 24, 2008
One shimmering eye
stares at me through the window.
Don’t leave me, sweet moon.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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Mike_Tython said...
today at 9:53 am
*through tearth of joy* Thith wath the motht wonderful thing I've ever read
NJacobYThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Mar. 19 at 10:13 am
This haiku gave me a few ideas. Thank you.
Silver-winged said...
Aug. 30, 2012 at 5:55 pm
Sweet Poem. Awesome metaphor and imagery. I LOVED it, definately 5 star worthy! btw check out some of my work too  :)
Wilson1994 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 20, 2012 at 7:42 pm
This is full of meaning, I love the imagery, the sweetness and brightness, yet somehow such intensity, really beautiful.
dia.dreamer said...
Aug. 22, 2011 at 8:17 am
usually I read something twice or thrice before I rate it...I read this once and I rated it 5're a beautiful writer...awesome metaphor and lovely choice of it! btw, check out some of my work too. :)
dark_armor1 said...
Aug. 16, 2011 at 8:51 pm
i really like it. good job
dancer_1 said...
Jul. 31, 2011 at 8:28 pm

i like this poem it is very nice


freeflow23 said...
Jun. 12, 2011 at 3:35 pm
nice metephor
IamtheshyStargirl said...
Jun. 7, 2011 at 12:18 pm
Lovely. It definitely deserves its published status.
timeformetofly7 said...
Feb. 5, 2011 at 9:12 pm
ooh beautiful word choice. ur a clever one ;)
TheContentedWanderer94 said...
Jan. 14, 2011 at 5:12 pm
Beautiful! I imagine the moon as an eye also! :D Keep Writing!
MusicBaby21 said...
Nov. 19, 2010 at 12:00 pm
Lol ummm yo screen name fye
luvz2read said...
Oct. 25, 2010 at 3:17 pm
Sob!!!!1 that was soooo beautiful
avantgarde said...
Aug. 11, 2010 at 6:24 pm
This captures the moment perfectly! I can imagine the whole setting and the story behind the girl/boy of this poem. Great work :)
LastChapter said...
Jul. 10, 2010 at 8:32 pm
that was beautiful. it totally stood out in the sea of all other haikus. it takes real talent to be able to grab somebody's attention with 17 syllables. keep at it!
BleedingRose said...
May 17, 2010 at 10:54 am

I love this, very sweet and powerful.  Keep writing, and would you mind commenting on some of my work?  Thx!  5 stars  ;)


BleedingRose said...
May 17, 2010 at 10:53 am
What the heck is that?
Ninten1992 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 12, 2010 at 8:13 pm
Sweet and beautiful.
live.create16 said...
Apr. 3, 2010 at 1:06 pm
this is beautiful!
Girl-Writer said...
Mar. 27, 2010 at 10:34 pm
Very nice. A beautiful haiku, personification, and of course a nice array of verbal imagery. I like it. 
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