Loving You - Haiku Style

December 5, 2010
By EBarb PLATINUM, Seneca, South Carolina
EBarb PLATINUM, Seneca, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind." --Dr. Seuss


That look in your face,
A look that terrifies me,
And your words of rage.

I walk off, hopeless,
My heart too heavy for joy.
Tears ready to fall.

Hopelessly singing,
Hitting none of the right notes.
Gazing into space.

Come into the hall,
Walk toward you with no smile,
Then you surprise me.

Your arms wide open,
With the harsh expression gone,
"Sorry" on your lips.

Smile into your neck,
The relief you cannot see,
Joyful once again.

*
*
*

Though we're not perfect,
We are flawless together.
My light in the dark.

There's no other ride
Like the Ferris wheel we're on.
We're up...down. Up...down.

Still I'd wait all day,
Just to ride that ride with you,
Hold you hand in mine.

What never scared me
Is now the craziest ride,
Worth it all the while.

So we fight and fear,
We find joy in little things,
Not happy alone.

This wild ride I'm on,
I'd never step off because
I love loving you.


The author's comments:
This was inspired by a day with my boyfriend. The first part describes what happens, and the second part is just.. our relationship. I love him, and I wouldn't give that up for anything.

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on Dec. 27 2010 at 8:08 pm
sany.lastflame PLATINUM, Frederick, Colorado
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Love it! Great poem!

on Dec. 26 2010 at 7:18 pm
Seelix PLATINUM, Chandler, Arizona
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I realy liked this poem, the second part is great, but the first part gets you involved=)Excellent job!

on Dec. 25 2010 at 3:42 pm
Rina-with-a-k SILVER, Fayetteville, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Be the change you wish to see in the world.

That's really good. I love both parts, but I like the second one better. Especially
"Though we're not perfect,
We are flawless together.
My light in the dark."
I loved that part.

EBarb PLATINUM said...
on Dec. 24 2010 at 2:27 pm
EBarb PLATINUM, Seneca, South Carolina
29 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind." --Dr. Seuss

Thank you! (:

on Dec. 23 2010 at 12:44 pm
MakeItShine SILVER, Pembroke Pines, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
“I believe in Christianity as I believe that the sun has risen: not only because I see it, but because by it I see everything else.”
~C.S. Lewis.

This was great. It offered me a glimpse into your world and lasted throughout the poem. The best line is the last. It was very good. (:


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