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This is not a haiku.

Defiled by the dirt
of my own thoughts
no water can rinse me clean.



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AlexanderQ said...
Dec. 5, 2012 at 7:14 pm
Hi! Like I promised I am reviewing some of your work! I really like this haiku. I like the different and abnormal syllables and structure, however, my stupid perfectionist mind almost wants it to be in regular haiku form, so maybe play around with that? But overall I like the deep meaning of the poem. It really makes you think.
 
shadowrider said...
Jul. 10, 2011 at 11:32 pm
I love it!
 
Markus This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 7, 2011 at 3:56 pm
I like that you have exactly 17 syllables, in spite of it not having the same structure. I think that was a good way to shake up the poem. 
 
apocalyptigirl replied...
Jan. 7, 2011 at 6:42 pm
Thanks! I didn't intend that at first, but then I looked back and realized I had them.
 
Markus This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 7, 2011 at 7:16 pm
That's awesome. Maybe it was subliminal. 
 
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