heaven

September 30, 2009
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under my feet grass grows
above me the sky is a basin
as i hear bees buzz
everything about this is a perfect heaven
this is where i belong
it is serene and im at peace
i never want to leave
for once i feel like im wanted





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sammyso3 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 11, 2010 at 4:22 pm
It's beautiful, but as far as I know, it isn't a haiku... Haikus have a 5, 7, 5 structure.
 
4evrheartbroken replied...
Feb. 11, 2010 at 4:49 pm
yea sorry when i wrote it i completely forgot what a haiku was
 
elliottk said...
Oct. 20, 2009 at 3:09 pm
I would like to know why you didn’t capitalize the I’s or use punctuation marks in your response. Other than that I liked how you said,” this is where I belong”. That told me and pictured that the earth was beautiful and peaceful, and if earth is that great I wonder how good heaven will be. You confused me when you said,” for once I feel like I’m wanted”. What did you mean when you said that?
 
4evrheartbroken replied...
Oct. 25, 2009 at 11:00 am
i guess i kinda forgot to capetalize a few Is. I was kind of describing heaven... and like i was meaning that i belong and feel like I am supposed to be there
 
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