heaven

September 30, 2009
By an0nym0u5 GOLD, Big Lake, Minnesota
an0nym0u5 GOLD, Big Lake, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
"all that glitters is not gold."


under my feet grass grows
above me the sky is a basin
as i hear bees buzz
everything about this is a perfect heaven
this is where i belong
it is serene and im at peace
i never want to leave
for once i feel like im wanted



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an0nym0u5 GOLD said...
on Feb. 11 2010 at 4:49 pm
an0nym0u5 GOLD, Big Lake, Minnesota
12 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"all that glitters is not gold."

yea sorry when i wrote it i completely forgot what a haiku was

on Feb. 11 2010 at 4:22 pm
sammyso3 SILVER, Hastings, Nebraska
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Favorite Quote:
"We have to be continually jumping off cliffs and developing our wings on the way down." Kurt Vonnegut

It's beautiful, but as far as I know, it isn't a haiku... Haikus have a 5, 7, 5 structure.

an0nym0u5 GOLD said...
on Oct. 25 2009 at 11:00 am
an0nym0u5 GOLD, Big Lake, Minnesota
12 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"all that glitters is not gold."

i guess i kinda forgot to capetalize a few Is. I was kind of describing heaven... and like i was meaning that i belong and feel like I am supposed to be there

elliottk said...
on Oct. 20 2009 at 3:09 pm
I would like to know why you didn’t capitalize the I’s or use punctuation marks in your response. Other than that I liked how you said,” this is where I belong”. That told me and pictured that the earth was beautiful and peaceful, and if earth is that great I wonder how good heaven will be. You confused me when you said,” for once I feel like I’m wanted”. What did you mean when you said that?


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