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Will it calm again?

September 13, 2009
By Tybalt SILVER, Coral Springs, Florida
Tybalt SILVER, Coral Springs, Florida
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The water Ripples
Its reflection is blemished
It will calm again

A mirror shatters
Its reflectoin is destroyed
It won't calm again

A life changes course
Its reflection confusing
will it calm again?



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~*WoW*~ said...
on May. 6 2010 at 1:15 pm
WOW. I luv this poem:D 

on May. 6 2010 at 1:09 pm
ii Liike thiz 1,,like totally dude! it iz awesome(=

on Apr. 23 2010 at 12:33 pm
Are-Jay-Em-Ess BRONZE, Ruffsdale, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't hate your enemy, it effects your judgement."
"Just because you put a coe in a cage, doesn't mean it will sing."
"Useless information, no such thing."

very well written, you take ordinary occurance and put a deeper meaning to it. But I believe that you could add more. Your hiaku has the potential of becoming deeper.

 


Cuore GOLD said...
on Apr. 14 2010 at 9:22 pm
Cuore GOLD, Saint Augustine, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Be the change you wish to see- Ghandi

Everything in this room is eatable, even I'm eatable, but that my dears is called cannibalism and is highly frowned upon in most societies.- Willy Wonka

Bright lights often blind those who can't see. ~

Wow!!! That's cool.

Sweet2bme2 said...
on Apr. 14 2010 at 12:12 pm
Sweet2bme2, Saugus, Massachusetts
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this has meaning and it was really good. Keep writing!

Jtaco95 said...
on Apr. 14 2010 at 11:59 am
Jtaco95, Saugus, Massachusetts
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This is a great haiku. People can read this and relate it to some things going on their life, btw you spelt Reflection wrong in the second verse

alyyyx609 said...
on Apr. 14 2010 at 11:47 am
alyyyx609, Saugus, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
be who you want to be, or else - myself

you spelt reflection wrong, but good job hunnay ! i like how you refer from rain, to mirrors, then to life !

xxCMMx16 said...
on Apr. 14 2010 at 9:06 am
xxCMMx16, Saugus, Massachusetts
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i liked your poem.

Eric DeMeo said...
on Apr. 14 2010 at 8:50 am
Eric DeMeo, Saugus, Massachusetts
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Nice I like the way you described calm.

ryne8 said...
on Apr. 14 2010 at 8:50 am
ryne8, Saugus, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
yeroo

nice poem it is cool

monkular said...
on Apr. 14 2010 at 8:49 am
monkular, Saugus, Massachusetts
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cooooooooooooooool

asdfgh said...
on Apr. 14 2010 at 8:45 am
asdfgh, Saugus, Massachusetts
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I Like Your Poem(:

on Mar. 17 2010 at 8:11 pm
Brittaner DIAMOND, Edenton, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"words are just songs without the corny elevator music behind them"
-Me (random thought)

I love how this tells a story within it's self. Keep up the good work.

Thrush BRONZE said...
on Feb. 7 2010 at 10:17 am
Thrush BRONZE, Tegaad, Other
4 articles 0 photos 65 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Live life to it's fullest extent, it's the only life you've got" "Enjoy yourself, be yourself, love yourself"

Very deep, assuming it's about love, loss, wounds, and healing? Very nice.

thalia847 GOLD said...
on Dec. 28 2009 at 8:44 pm
thalia847 GOLD, Tempe, Arizona
13 articles 4 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be Who you are and say what you feel because those you mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind"

Short yet powerful. I love it <33

on Dec. 28 2009 at 4:43 pm
lovely : D

on Dec. 16 2009 at 10:10 am
Sissybug2012 PLATINUM, Union, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"the greatest thing you'll ever learn, is just to love and be loved in return." -MOULIN ROUGE (song lyrics)

wow. that's different. i like the ending question. hhhmm, very nice.

on Dec. 8 2009 at 10:07 pm
Born_to_fly GOLD, Peoria, Arizona
11 articles 4 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I disaprove of what you say, but i will defend to the death your right to say it." ~Voltaire

nice job and so true.

keep up the work.

kpf1991 said...
on Nov. 11 2009 at 10:12 pm
kpf1991, East Hanover, New Jersey
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Hey could you check out "anguish" or "They see through me" and rate it or just let know what you think? you have great talent and i'd really appreciate your input

on Nov. 11 2009 at 1:39 pm
Brazerker BRONZE, Garretson, South Dakota
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I like how think haiku descibes the water, and how its reflection is blemished.


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