Walking Through the Woods MAG

September 17, 2009
By Elizabeth Ridolfi SILVER, Auburn, California
Elizabeth Ridolfi SILVER, Auburn, California
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My feet hit the snow as
I walk, the wind blows, homeless
Through trees and my heart



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on Apr. 29 2010 at 6:45 pm
Isabella_B. GOLD, Cranston, Rhode Island
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i love the idea of homeless wind, it really sets the mood for the rest of the poem. amazing.

on Apr. 7 2010 at 11:35 am
soccerchic101010 BRONZE, Palm Desert, California
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"Love life." <3333

i agree with getting rid of the as :) great poem though!!!

s.peverell said...
on Mar. 17 2010 at 4:06 pm
I like how you described the wind as homeless. the simplicity was very nice and I feel it captured a walk in the woods, as you effectively described feeling part of the forest (wind blowing through trees and your heart)

Lilly101 said...
on Feb. 26 2010 at 9:07 am
Lilly101, Rancho Cordova, California
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"Don't stop believing"

Hey I really like your hikku needs more work but its really good!! keep up the good work! :)

on Jan. 31 2010 at 3:15 pm
firefly116 BRONZE, Southern Pines, North Carolina
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DeadlyPoppy, if you find a really good and properly written sonnet on this sight please post response to let me know. i can't find any well written limericks in good form either. such a bother :)

on Jan. 9 2010 at 11:09 pm
DeadlyPoppy PLATINUM, Chehalis, Washington
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"Is mayonnaise an instrument?" -Patrick, Spongebob Squarepants

I agree. It's a good poem but should be posted under free verse. I think the point of a Haiku and Sonnet is to be able to express your thoughts within the limitations in a beautiful way and have the reader still be able to understand your meaning. I have also read a lot of Sonnets that are not even close to a proper sonnet and they bother me too, being that they are well written, but not in the right category.

Akio-san said...
on Jan. 9 2010 at 11:00 am
not a haiku more a free verse sorry XD but i liked it ^^

on Jan. 9 2010 at 12:56 am
DeadlyPoppy PLATINUM, Chehalis, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
"Is mayonnaise an instrument?" -Patrick, Spongebob Squarepants

It was good, but I don't understand why you don't just eliminate the word as. It is your writing though, and it was a good poem.

g.a.w. said...
on Dec. 28 2009 at 4:46 pm
I guess that technically its not a haiku but its wonderful just the same! i love it : )

on Dec. 21 2009 at 11:04 am
literaryaddict PLATINUM, Albuquerque, New Mexico
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"We're almost there and no where near it. All that matters is that we're going." Lorelai Gilmore, Gilmore Girls
"The whole theory of modern education is radically unsound." Lady Bracknell, The Importance of Being Earnest, Oscar Wilde

even if the top and bottom lines were the same in this poem, it's not a haiku. there are just some forms of poetry where the form is unchangeable. haiku and sonnet are examples.

on Dec. 18 2009 at 6:08 pm
ElizabethW. DIAMOND, Oconto, Wisconsin
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I think it's still okay. Poetry is really subjective today, even haiku. I think the only real requirements are that the top and bottom line are the same and are a few syllables more than the middle.

on Nov. 18 2009 at 11:46 am
brunette BRONZE, Azusa, California
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Be yourself, no one else

That is really good I like what you think.

on Nov. 4 2009 at 6:53 pm
literaryaddict PLATINUM, Albuquerque, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
"We're almost there and no where near it. All that matters is that we're going." Lorelai Gilmore, Gilmore Girls
"The whole theory of modern education is radically unsound." Lady Bracknell, The Importance of Being Earnest, Oscar Wilde

great poem but not a haiku!! it has 5 syllanble on the first line, seven on the second, and five on the last line. not trying to be spiteful, but i'd call this free verse not haiku

on Sep. 27 2009 at 5:48 pm
JenniferB. SILVER, Harvey, Louisiana
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This is not a haiku!!!! 575 syllables

kaseyyy BRONZE said...
on Sep. 21 2009 at 8:14 am
kaseyyy BRONZE, Springfield, Ohio
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very descriptive without being complicated. i really liked the detail about the wind being homeless.

LilJ<3 GOLD said...
on Sep. 19 2009 at 9:01 pm
LilJ<3 GOLD, Gloucester, Virginia
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Simple, yet complex. Great Job. Truely Loved it.


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