sea haiku

August 30, 2009
By rainskye SILVER, Redlands, California
rainskye SILVER, Redlands, California
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the ocean hugs the beach

caressing the shore gently

as the waves fall back.

the sea pounds the cliffs

thundering up the crescent

whirling in fury.

the tide returns calmed

stroking ravages away

smoothing out the beach.

The author's comments:
this is something like a sequel to a previous poem posted here, called "river haiku". it's longer, and, i don't think, flows as well. but don't let my opinion strangle yours.

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on Dec. 17 2016 at 8:17 am
LeisurelySketches SILVER, Mohali, Punjab, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Your life has a limit but knowledge has none. (Zhuangzi)

Great starting and vivid description. It's a very soothing poem.

on Aug. 12 2014 at 1:03 pm
Greengirl1d SILVER, Lynbrook, New York
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"Everyone deserves a chance to fly."

This is a beautiful depiction of the sea! Great job! 

on Mar. 17 2014 at 8:05 am
WinterRose76 SILVER, Ok., Florida
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Arise and be all that you dream - Flyleaf

I absolutely love your vivid descriptions! Although this isn't a proper haiku, it's still an excellent poem. In my personal opinion though, I wish you capitalized the first word of every line, or at least the beginning of each haiku. It would have made your poem look as nice as it reads!  

Girl-Writer said...
on Mar. 27 2010 at 10:52 pm
Ditto pjn3lp. Not a pure haiku but still very good. And what happened to river haiku? All well.

pjn3lp said...
on Sep. 8 2009 at 10:57 pm
Good personification in your description of the ocean. It wasn't pure haiku as far as the syllabication goes, but a good descriptive poem nonetheless.


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