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the ocean hugs the beach

caressing the shore gently

as the waves fall back.

the sea pounds the cliffs

thundering up the crescent

whirling in fury.

the tide returns calmed

stroking ravages away

smoothing out the beach.



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Greengirl1d said...
today at 1:03 pm:
This is a beautiful depiction of the sea! Great job! 
 
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WinterRose1976This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Mar. 17 at 8:05 am:
I absolutely love your vivid descriptions! Although this isn't a proper haiku, it's still an excellent poem. In my personal opinion though, I wish you capitalized the first word of every line, or at least the beginning of each haiku. It would have made your poem look as nice as it reads!  
 
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Girl-Writer said...
Mar. 27, 2010 at 10:52 pm:
Ditto pjn3lp. Not a pure haiku but still very good. And what happened to river haiku? All well.
 
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pjn3lp said...
Sept. 8, 2009 at 10:57 pm:
Good personification in your description of the ocean. It wasn't pure haiku as far as the syllabication goes, but a good descriptive poem nonetheless.
 
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