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Leaf Haiku

Dead leaves on the ground
Just like dreams I used to have
Trampled and broken




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Kamilah B. said...
Feb. 12, 2011 at 8:15 pm:
Perfection in three lines :)
 
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Eqrider This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 12, 2011 at 5:35 pm:
Wow! very concise,visual, and flowing!
 
swimster16 replied...
Jan. 21, 2011 at 1:46 pm :
Very visual!!! I love how you go very deep with just that kind of space!
 
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warriorsfan711 said...
Oct. 3, 2010 at 8:25 pm:
This is amazing i love it, and can completly relate with it.
 
kekkkkk replied...
Dec. 10, 2010 at 1:00 pm :
so can i.
 
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BlueStarling said...
Sept. 18, 2010 at 10:25 pm:
I like it...
 
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BleedingRose said...
Jun. 15, 2010 at 10:12 pm:

I love the comparison, such great form!  Don't stop writing!  And if you have time, I really wouldn't mind if you commented on some of my work.  ;)  You have uch talent in so few words, 5 stars.

-Rose

 
ashbashThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jun. 16, 2010 at 9:44 am :
thank you for all the encouragement! it really helps!
 
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funnythewayitis said...
May 2, 2010 at 5:46 pm:
I love it. A wonderful simile that I often think about leaves believe it or not.
 
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juliannaa said...
Apr. 14, 2010 at 11:51 am:
I really like this, it caught my eye and I thought you did a really good job. It really goes together. :)
 
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*StandardToaster* said...
Feb. 11, 2010 at 10:34 pm:
I absolutely adore this haiku! this is my favorite haiku in all the world. kudos to u. check out my work? i suggest Heart On Fire or Just Because
 
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*StandardToaster* said...
Feb. 11, 2010 at 9:39 pm:
wow this is absolutely wonderful. so beatifully simple. check out my work? http ://www.teenink .com /poetry/all/article/168414/Heart-on-Fire/
 
ashbashThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Feb. 19, 2010 at 9:52 am :
hi. i did check out your work before. Great Job!!!!!!!!
 
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