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Disappointment

The endless rainfall
Shattering my hope of sun
Forming mud puddles.



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Aga-jean S. said...
May 22, 2012 at 9:36 pm
Short, simple and Fantastic!!!! is all i gotta say. Nice job :)
 
AMAWHI said...
May 22, 2012 at 10:11 am
I like this haiku a lot! It reminds me the days that there was rain when I needed the sunshine to make me happy. Good job, I really like it. I t brought me sorrow and memories good and bad.
 
DragonMaster66.6 said...
Nov. 19, 2010 at 11:35 am
That was very good, and this also brought me disappoinment. Not the haiku itself but rather the haiku. What I'm trying to say is that you chose a good title as well. :)
 
nancyyy said...
Oct. 28, 2010 at 7:31 pm
Wow! A very strong haiku. In haikus I find it hard to find the right few words, but here they are carefully chosen to describe the rain perfectly.
 
GreenLover said...
Sept. 14, 2010 at 10:27 am

nicely written. so little words but big meaning.

you should check out some of my new work. rate, commet, critize. thanks!

 
Blue4 said...
Aug. 23, 2010 at 11:34 am

Great poem-so little words, yet such vivid pictures. 5/5 stars!

By the way, would you read some of my stories, rate, and critisize? Thanks.

 
cmcampbell This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 1, 2010 at 12:29 pm
I love the idea of rain shattering hopes! I can really see it! Great job! Please check out my article entitled True Blood! :D Thank you
 
yazhira_saphira said...
Jul. 10, 2010 at 9:46 pm
nice haiku...good meaning.but personally, I really don't like haikus. They're to short to be appreciated.haha.
 
dia.dreamer replied...
Sept. 1, 2011 at 1:03 pm

my friend also feels that haiku are incomplete/short. but that's the whole point. to bring lots of meaning into few but powerful words. the rest is upto our imagination.

love the haiku. you did a really awesome job. keep writing. :)

 
ShenelleCrystalx3 said...
Jun. 18, 2010 at 3:14 pm

That was so good !  Don't ever stop  writing :)

Please come and check out my poems [comment or rate] Thank u

 
Patience97 said...
May 5, 2010 at 2:37 pm
I like the way I can relate to your poem.
 
ParamoreFan131 said...
Mar. 22, 2010 at 8:08 pm
Wow love it :) Fantastic job!
 
Chibbie said...
Jan. 16, 2010 at 11:50 pm
hey this is really awsome i can tell how much you feel the rain
 
Hope_PrincessThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Sept. 2, 2009 at 2:47 pm
This has such clear imagery and I could almost see the rain streaming down my windows.
Keep writing!
 
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