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Disappointment

The endless rainfall
Shattering my hope of sun
Forming mud puddles.



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Aga-jean S. said...
May 22, 2012 at 9:36 pm:
Short, simple and Fantastic!!!! is all i gotta say. Nice job :)
 
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AMAWHI said...
May 22, 2012 at 10:11 am:
I like this haiku a lot! It reminds me the days that there was rain when I needed the sunshine to make me happy. Good job, I really like it. I t brought me sorrow and memories good and bad.
 
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DragonMaster66.6 said...
Nov. 19, 2010 at 11:35 am:
That was very good, and this also brought me disappoinment. Not the haiku itself but rather the haiku. What I'm trying to say is that you chose a good title as well. :)
 
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nancyyy said...
Oct. 28, 2010 at 7:31 pm:
Wow! A very strong haiku. In haikus I find it hard to find the right few words, but here they are carefully chosen to describe the rain perfectly.
 
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GreenLover said...
Sept. 14, 2010 at 10:27 am:

nicely written. so little words but big meaning.

you should check out some of my new work. rate, commet, critize. thanks!

 
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Blue4 said...
Aug. 23, 2010 at 11:34 am:

Great poem-so little words, yet such vivid pictures. 5/5 stars!

By the way, would you read some of my stories, rate, and critisize? Thanks.

 
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cmcampbell This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 1, 2010 at 12:29 pm:
I love the idea of rain shattering hopes! I can really see it! Great job! Please check out my article entitled True Blood! :D Thank you
 
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yazhira_saphira said...
Jul. 10, 2010 at 9:46 pm:
nice haiku...good meaning.but personally, I really don't like haikus. They're to short to be appreciated.haha.
 
dia.dreamer replied...
Sept. 1, 2011 at 1:03 pm :

my friend also feels that haiku are incomplete/short. but that's the whole point. to bring lots of meaning into few but powerful words. the rest is upto our imagination.

love the haiku. you did a really awesome job. keep writing. :)

 
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ShenelleCrystalx3 said...
Jun. 18, 2010 at 3:14 pm:

That was so good !  Don't ever stop  writing :)

Please come and check out my poems [comment or rate] Thank u

 
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Patience97 said...
May 5, 2010 at 2:37 pm:
I like the way I can relate to your poem.
 
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ParamoreFan131 said...
Mar. 22, 2010 at 8:08 pm:
Wow love it :) Fantastic job!
 
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Chibbie said...
Jan. 16, 2010 at 11:50 pm:
hey this is really awsome i can tell how much you feel the rain
 
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Hope_PrincessThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Sept. 2, 2009 at 2:47 pm:
This has such clear imagery and I could almost see the rain streaming down my windows.
Keep writing!
 
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