Done.

May 12, 2017

Under the moon
Under the stars
We realized what we are
We were free
You loved me
But now youre gone
But I cant go on
I guess I´m am done






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addictwithapenThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 28 at 10:12 am
Remember to use apostrophes in contractions, so “can’t” and “you’re”. Use only “I am” or “I’m” in the last line, because having “I’m am” is repetitive. This is a good start to a poem. I would recommend expanding it to illustrate how exactly the speaker is “done”. The ending seems a bit abrupt, and adding more about the speaker’s feelings could remedy that.
 
MakenzieIsHumanThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Aug. 3 at 7:48 pm
Thank you for your help :)
 
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