i am ..............

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I am fallen

i am within

i am therefored

i am free

i am justified

i am awesome

i am withered

i am jealous

i am kind

i am lost

i am found

i am forgotten about

i am .............






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jp1260This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
May 12 at 1:05 pm
ok thanks very much
 
hwoodruff98This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 13 at 10:30 am
This is a nice piece. I would suggest the following edits: Line 3: "Therefored" is not a word. What did you mean to say with this? Perhaps I can help you find a word for it. Line 7: "Withered" seems like a contradiction to the previous few lines in which the speaker is "free" and "awesome." In what ways is he/she free? In what ways is he/she withered? And why? This poem is a simple list as it is, but it would be stronger if the speaker would answer these questions and perhaps provide some image... (more »)
 
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