Burning Heart

March 30, 2017
By JJ_Lone PLATINUM, Davenport, Washington
JJ_Lone PLATINUM, Davenport, Washington
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Broken hearts can still survive
Through and through with no more lies
As I did, not long ago
While moving on awfully and terribly slow.

Watching as the clouds move on
Missing the moon as it's gone
Missing my smile, I had not long
Laughing and trying to make it strong

A genuine smile shall return
And from this, I shall learn
That to try to even yearn
Will only result in a burn.



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on Dec. 14 2017 at 7:46 am
WolfWhisperer0911 PLATINUM, Crosby, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"For I command you, be brave and steadfast! For the Lord your God will be with you whenever you go."
-Joshua 1:9

"Throw me to the wolves, and I'll return leading the pack."- Unknown

"Never moon a werewolf." -Mike Binder

@JJ_Lone Great job! I love this poem! IT gives a good mee=ssage that love is fire consuming everything, burning them to ash.

on Oct. 19 2017 at 10:42 am
JJ_Lone PLATINUM, Davenport, Washington
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Copy and paste it

on Oct. 19 2017 at 10:42 am
JJ_Lone PLATINUM, Davenport, Washington
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i.imgur. com /Z6GYWZx . png

on Oct. 17 2017 at 6:44 pm
FluffyPanda427 SILVER, Olympia, Washington
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Oh wait there is no "edit article"...hmmmm :/

on Oct. 17 2017 at 6:09 pm
FluffyPanda427 SILVER, Olympia, Washington
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Ok thank you so much

on Oct. 17 2017 at 10:46 am
JJ_Lone PLATINUM, Davenport, Washington
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When you go to your work, underneath it should be "edit article"

on Oct. 15 2017 at 9:50 pm
FluffyPanda427 SILVER, Olympia, Washington
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How do you edit something you already submitted?

on Apr. 9 2017 at 9:50 am
addictwithapen PLATINUM, Chesapeake, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"I'm at it again as an addict with a pen." - twenty one pilots, addict with a pen

My favorite part is “That to try to even yearn/ Will only result in a burn”. I suggest separating this poem into three stanzas based on the rhyme to improve flow. Also, I recommend adding a comma in line 3 to clarify the meaning; without one it is uncertain whether you mean “As I did, not long ago” (meaning you did this thing a short while ago), or “As I did not, long ago” (meaning you did not do this thing, a long while ago). I assume you mean the first but a comma would make it clearer. In line 6, replace “its” with “it’s”.


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