an anthem for the queen in my life

July 18, 2016
By MissMimi BRONZE, Ashland, Oregon
MissMimi BRONZE, Ashland, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
"Tell me, what is it you plan to do with your one wild and precious life?" -Mary Oliver

this is for the girls crafted from smoke and steel
with eyes made of lava instead of starlight
you are woven from strands of fierce and feral will,
your thoughts vaster than the oceans combined.
they are scared of your light
they fear your minds
you terrible, beautiful creatures.
let them wonder at it all, let them quake
but don’t give them a valid reason
let them only fear your fearlessness.
be kind, be soft,
stay wild but banish hostility
let them inhale your smoke and
pound at your steel walls.
you will not break
and you will not break them.

-they are afraid of what they do not understand and what they cannot control

The author's comments:

this is written for/ inspired by my sister, who is fifteen, fiercely alive, and forged from steel, smoke, and song.

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This article has 4 comments.

on May. 15 2017 at 9:19 pm
ambivalent GOLD, West Bend, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
everything in life is writable about if you have the outgoing guts to do it, and the imagination to improvise. the worst enemy to creativity is self-doubt. [sylvia plath]

absolutely love this! the only thing i would change would be to get rid of the abstract wording like "valid reason" and "be kind, be soft" and instead SHOW it. concrete images almost always create a more emotional impact with the reader.

on Jul. 25 2016 at 11:16 pm
pineappler03 SILVER, Waterford, Connecticut
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Amazing poem!

--Em-- GOLD said...
on Jul. 22 2016 at 12:17 pm
--Em-- GOLD, Grand Rapids, Michigan
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I love that this is inspired by your sister; it shows this isn't just a beautiful combination of powerful words, but also personal and real. Keep writing!

on Jul. 22 2016 at 10:07 am
Patricia_Yao BRONZE, Orefield, Pennsylvania
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I love the message of this poem, and I feel like it applies to many aspects how society treats people.


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