See me

July 5, 2016
By Realest.Feminist. BRONZE, Delmar,NY, New York
Realest.Feminist. BRONZE, Delmar,NY, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Reality is wrong. Dreams are for real."- Tupac Shakur


Close your eyes,
Picture a girl,
She’s medium height, she’s got almond shaped dark brown eyes,short hair,and dark brown skin
She’s loud, she laughs, and talks about normal things,guys,her favorite shows,and complains about her latest problem
She’s not popular, she’s not a loner, she just average,
You’d be surprised to know that’s only her outside,
She keeps herself tucked away,you never see her cry
She keeps herself out of sight,who is she in your eyes?
She’ll keep herself tucked away she’ll never go outside
Somebody get her out,she doesn’t want to hide

She just doesn't want to know how she's seen in your eyes.



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on Aug. 29 2016 at 5:44 pm
Consalvator BRONZE, South Jordan, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"Once you make a decision, the universe conspires to make it happen." - Ralph Waldo Emerson

Killer last line. The rest of the poem was good, and then the last line was great. Lovely concept on self esteem, and captures a common theme not talked about enough. The only thing that bugged me was no spaces after the commas, but that's just nit picky. Nice work.

Gagax SILVER said...
on Aug. 8 2016 at 5:17 am
Gagax SILVER, Sugarland, Texas
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Hello! Your poem is good. But can u put a space after the commas i know i know im a grammar nazi but it bothered me xD its not a big deal. Your poem is good.

on Jul. 31 2016 at 2:41 pm
poetic.eyes PLATINUM, Everson, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
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Definitely relatable. I found that the last 5 lines were the strongest. I love the way you ask the reader a question, I find that makes the reader ask themselves whether they really "know" the people in their life, or whether they should search a little deeper.

Luminary said...
on Jul. 27 2016 at 6:50 am
Luminary, New Delhi, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Being in love with yourself first doesn't make you selfish,it makes you indestructible. :)

Welcome :)

on Jul. 26 2016 at 10:42 am
YoungBeauty GOLD, Claremont, New Hampshire
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Favorite Quote:
" Beauty isn't about having pretty face. It's about having a pretty mind, a pretty heart, and a pretty soul"

I love this poem,and it is very ralatable to me. Please continue to express yourself through poetry. Happy writing!

on Jul. 25 2016 at 8:20 pm
Realest.Feminist. BRONZE, Delmar,NY, New York
4 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Reality is wrong. Dreams are for real."- Tupac Shakur

Thx for the review :)

on Jul. 25 2016 at 8:07 pm
missfloetry SILVER, Forest Park, Illinois
7 articles 1 photo 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't mistake my kindness for weakness. I am kind to everyone, but when someone is unkind to me, weak is not what you are going to remember about me."
-Al Capone, American Gangster

I love this!

on Jul. 25 2016 at 7:15 pm
Realest.Feminist. BRONZE, Delmar,NY, New York
4 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Reality is wrong. Dreams are for real."- Tupac Shakur

Thank you so much!

Luminary said...
on Jul. 25 2016 at 9:40 am
Luminary, New Delhi, Other
0 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
Being in love with yourself first doesn't make you selfish,it makes you indestructible. :)

The poem is amazing. I mean it is very much relatable. Kudos :)




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