See me

July 5, 2016

Close your eyes,
Picture a girl,
She’s medium height, she’s got almond shaped dark brown eyes,short hair,and dark brown skin
She’s loud, she laughs, and talks about normal things,guys,her favorite shows,and complains about her latest problem
She’s not popular, she’s not a loner, she just average,
You’d be surprised to know that’s only her outside,
She keeps herself tucked away,you never see her cry
She keeps herself out of sight,who is she in your eyes?
She’ll keep herself tucked away she’ll never go outside
Somebody get her out,she doesn’t want to hide

She just doesn't want to know how she's seen in your eyes.

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Consalvator This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 29, 2016 at 5:44 pm
Killer last line. The rest of the poem was good, and then the last line was great. Lovely concept on self esteem, and captures a common theme not talked about enough. The only thing that bugged me was no spaces after the commas, but that's just nit picky. Nice work.
Gagax said...
Aug. 8, 2016 at 5:17 am
Hello! Your poem is good. But can u put a space after the commas i know i know im a grammar nazi but it bothered me xD its not a big deal. Your poem is good.
poetic.eyes said...
Jul. 31, 2016 at 2:41 pm
Definitely relatable. I found that the last 5 lines were the strongest. I love the way you ask the reader a question, I find that makes the reader ask themselves whether they really "know" the people in their life, or whether they should search a little deeper.
YoungBeauty said...
Jul. 26, 2016 at 10:42 am
I love this poem,and it is very ralatable to me. Please continue to express yourself through poetry. Happy writing!
missfloetry said...
Jul. 25, 2016 at 8:07 pm
I love this!
kirstyI replied...
Jul. 25, 2016 at 8:20 pm
Thx for the review :)
Luminary said...
Jul. 25, 2016 at 9:40 am
The poem is amazing. I mean it is very much relatable. Kudos :)
kirstyI replied...
Jul. 25, 2016 at 7:15 pm
Thank you so much!
Luminary replied...
Jul. 27, 2016 at 6:50 am
Welcome :)
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