Umbrella World

June 16, 2016
By --Em-- GOLD, Grand Rapids, Michigan
--Em-- GOLD, Grand Rapids, Michigan
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Though thunder roars and rolls across the darkened sky,
and flashes of light tear the midnight in half,
I lift my face to the rain
and smile as my worries puddle at my feet.
I wish everyone would stop for a moment
and put away their umbrellas.



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on Aug. 7 2016 at 11:56 pm
This is beautifully simple. As is rain, so it makes sense that it would be written like so. The diction in this is incredibly fitting. Thank you for sharing. Keep writing. If you could check out my work and comment, it would be appreciated. Thanks!

on Jul. 24 2016 at 4:06 pm
kingfisher316 SILVER, Whitehouse Station, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
“Life appears to me too short to be spent in nursing animosity or registering wrongs.”- Charlotte Bronte

You have a way with words, given that you only needed a few to express such depth and feeling! I love how you pool all of your emotion into one simple and natural occurrence: rain. It's brilliant in a rather classical and understated sort of way

on Jul. 22 2016 at 5:36 pm
syleepandora BRONZE, Gyeonggido, Other
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I definitely think that the alliteration in the first line was artistic. The poem also conveyed a meaningful message— great work!

on Jul. 22 2016 at 8:56 am
anonymous06 PLATINUM, Northbridge, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"I have not failed. I've just found 10,000 ways that won't work." -Thomas Edison

Incredible imagery! Short and sweet= beautiful.

on Jul. 22 2016 at 1:41 am
MissMimi BRONZE, Ashland, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
"Tell me, what is it you plan to do with your one wild and precious life?" -Mary Oliver

Dense with beautiful meaning- I wouldn't change a thing. Poignant. Keep it up!

on Jun. 26 2016 at 12:07 am
LadyPhoenix BRONZE, Portland, Oregon
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Revenge is not a dish best served cold. Revenge is a dish best served like a Vegas buffet, never ending and with style.

I really like the sort of lyrical cadence this has, and the imagery is very effective. Continue writing!

on Jun. 21 2016 at 8:16 pm
SultanaofOceans BRONZE, Orefield, Pennsylvania
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This is really good. I wish you would've written more; it would've been nice to read.




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