The sea & war

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Calm, beautiful and careless is the sea

While war is an ugly thing to watch or see

The sea flow smoothly and is always blue to the human eye

But war, my men of arms, is filled with redness of the men who dies

 

But is the sea always this calm?

Does it always feel as soft as a baby's palm?

What about war? Is it always filled with chaos and men dead?

Will it ever be as peaceful as sleep when a person lie down to bed?

No, I tell you men, the sea isn't always calm and beautiful

It can make walls called tsunamis which kill people by the handful

No, men, war wil no always be devastating and horrible

When peace in war comes, war is tolerable

 

But why would the sea kill? Why does it throw people away like bones?

Would you believe it, the sea has a mind of its own

As dos war, when it comes, and can't be controlled or tamed

Yet, you brave men, are here today with your hears aflamed

 

My men of war shall be victorious over sea and war

My time here is up, for i see bright lights at the golden door

Go now, my men at arms, and take with you my last message:

"Never lose faith, Never give up, Remember what we fight for and Never leave your brother behind."

 

Signed the Brave Soldier






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RJRidley said...
May 23, 2016 at 8:07 am
good idea but for personally there was a lot of telling but of what something was rather than showing. he opened a book and begun to read [tell] he could smell the old pages from the libary as he's eyes took chance on the words in front of him. [show]
 
Edawg1 replied...
May 23, 2016 at 1:58 pm
i have no idea what your saying. could you be a little more specific? thank you! oh... by the way you spelled "his" wrong in your sentence. as the fruit fell, he reached out to catch it with no hands. he read with no eyes and ran with no feet. talked with no mouth and smelled with no nose. now top that off! that is a challenge and yes i accept. how about you? up for a challenge or what?
 
RJRidley replied...
May 24, 2016 at 6:42 am
All I'm saying that when you tell someone what you're doing the words are much more direct. showing is like a lot of little hints without actually telling them. My last sentence never specifically mentioned it was a book there were hints that said he was reading a book in a library. Haha well I got a hole lot more where that came from! Ever giving, sometimes taking, around the rocks, waves are braking, sparkling blue, deep sea green, brown as mud, clear and clean. White foam horses riding high ... (more »)
 
Edawg1 replied...
May 24, 2016 at 9:15 am
alright bub! now you got my attention! hope your ready for this! here it is: once in a while, once in a life time, once on a full moon, once in and out for all to see but not hear, when once became twice, twice became thrice, killer five shot rocks on the side of the docks, moons moving waves to the land, volcanoes eruptions everywhere, chaos and mayhem seen everywhere what is this? can you tell me?
 
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