Bus Trip of a Black God MAG

February 25, 2009
By Devon Johnson BRONZE, Phoenix, Arizona
Devon Johnson BRONZE, Phoenix, Arizona
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Skinny, black man
Cruising on the Valley Metro
Rambling on about black God, black heaven, black Savior, black world
I listen to what he says for half an hour.
I’m intrigued.
I put my headphones away
And listen …
Every so often, he hums
“Hhhmmmm”
And when he does you don’t see it coming
It makes you feel good inside.
“Hhhmmmm”
When you think it’s not over, he rings the bell
Ring, ring
The bus stops
He’s gone as quickly as he came.



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yoitskody said...
on Oct. 4 2013 at 2:29 pm
i liked this poem it was very interesting

on Dec. 7 2012 at 1:17 pm
Interesting! :)

Goldy97 GOLD said...
on May. 14 2012 at 9:00 am
Goldy97 GOLD, Savona, New York
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Favorite Quote:
There is nothing worth hoping for when there is no hope left.

I really like this poem it has alot of meaning behind it.

on Jan. 25 2012 at 8:01 pm
blah_blah BRONZE, Orange, New Jersey
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very deep and has a nice flow to it

on Jan. 3 2012 at 1:32 am
Missundrstoodx2, Indianapolis, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
"You never know what it enough until you know what is more than enough."

this is wonderful. I feel several things; a subtle introduction of race, like the color of a man dominates his world. but why is the white man never called the white man, never distinguished as seeing a white God, white heaven, white Savior, just God, Heaven, Savior? Such innocent beauty in one's interaction with a stranger; slightly dangerous, but harmless. Unlearning what we've been taught about them. The comfort of oneself is contagious, the "hmmm" being the most memorable hum the listener will hear above the music. And then the moment is over, like those coming and going on a bus...bittersweet silence. Thank you.

on Dec. 12 2011 at 2:22 pm
GoGoGryffindor BRONZE, Las Vegas, Nevada
1 article 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
-After all this time?
-Always.

This is a very interesting piece. I really like the way it flows and how it all comes together.

on Nov. 20 2011 at 12:57 pm
Myrtle25 BRONZE, New York, New York
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I love the flow of the poem and especially the ending! Nice topic.

on Nov. 20 2011 at 10:33 am
JamesODalaigh BRONZE, Bandon, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Ever tried. Ever failed. No matter. Try Again. Fail again. Fail better -Samuel Beckett.
Don't be seduced into thinking that that which does not make a profit is without value -Arthur Miller.

Love it! Rally great work and nice way of description.

on Sep. 15 2011 at 11:43 pm
Wordscantsay BRONZE, Yuma, Arizona
1 article 1 photo 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
When she was just a girl she expected the world. But it flew away from her reach, so she ran away in her sleep...
- Coldplay

Wonderful job.... Very nice :)

on Aug. 24 2011 at 7:22 pm
SunkistKisser BRONZE, Tempe, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
"Not one would mind, neither bird not tree
If mankind perished utterly
And Spring herself, when she woke at down,
Would hardly know that we were gone." ~Sara Teasdale
(Yea, I know, it's kind of deep, but I kind of dig it.))

First of all, loved it! Second, I'm also from the valley and  though it was awesome that you mentioned the bus lines here. Good job! :)

on Jul. 11 2011 at 7:40 pm
Lola_Black GOLD, Harrison, Michigan
11 articles 2 photos 276 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I've always been famous. It's just everybody's just now finding out." --Lady Gaga

I like it! Five stars, definately.

on Jul. 11 2011 at 7:38 pm
Lola_Black GOLD, Harrison, Michigan
11 articles 2 photos 276 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I've always been famous. It's just everybody's just now finding out." --Lady Gaga

Three of my poems that I sumbitted a few months ago just finally came in. I'm still waiting another.

on Apr. 14 2011 at 10:40 am
RosePoet2012 BRONZE, Bel Air, Maryland
3 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"One day we'll all be free and proud to be, under the same sunsinging songs of freedom" -Maytishu

This was really really good. I love this....great job!

on Feb. 7 2011 at 9:35 pm
KerliHairedGirl SILVER, Mound City, Missouri
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That was really good! :)

on Jan. 16 2011 at 6:02 pm
Candlesmile BRONZE, Edmonton, Other
2 articles 0 photos 1 comment
Wonderful work; the connection between religion and personal perspective is particularly intriguing.

on Jan. 16 2011 at 11:52 am
bahannahpeel PLATINUM, Bloomington, Illinois
27 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Schools corrupt the mind." The Loco Focos

I think it depends on the editor yours gets sent to. I've had some get published in two days, and I have some that are still pending from three weeks ago.

Loved the poem!


asofnow GOLD said...
on Dec. 3 2010 at 10:45 pm
asofnow GOLD, Troy, Michigan
18 articles 0 photos 209 comments

Favorite Quote:
Nothing gold can stay ~ Robert Frost

this is amazing and its so deep too

i hav a ? though.. how long does it take for teen ink to verify an article

cuz its taking a long long time

 


JohnniK SILVER said...
on Dec. 3 2010 at 8:40 am
JohnniK SILVER, Yongin, Other
6 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am who I am"

This poem is Lovely

Rayne GOLD said...
on Nov. 23 2010 at 11:45 pm
Rayne GOLD, Chippewa Falls, Wisconsin
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If there was a like button, i would like this.

on Nov. 11 2010 at 7:05 pm
Karamel PLATINUM, Gwinn, Michigan
35 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Clever people will recognize and tolerate nothing but cleverness." -Anonymous

This poem made me smile. I can see everything happening, and I understand the humming. This is a great poem. :)




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