Bus Trip of a Black God

I really like this poem it has alot of meaning behind it.

very deep and has a nice flow to it

this is wonderful. I feel several things; a subtle introduction of race, like the color of a man dominates his world. but why is the white man never called the white man, never distinguished as seeing a white God, white heaven, white Savior, just God, Heaven, Savior? Such innocent beauty in one's interaction with a stranger; slightly dangerous, but harmless. Unlearning what we've been taught about them. The comfort of oneself is contagious, the "hmmm" being the most memorable hum the listener wi... (more »)

This is a very interesting piece. I really like the way it flows and how it all comes together.

I love the flow of the poem and especially the ending! Nice topic.

Love it! Rally great work and nice way of description.

Wonderful job.... Very nice :)

First of all, loved it! Second, I'm also from the valley and  though it was awesome that you mentioned the bus lines here. Good job! :)

I like it! Five stars, definately.

That was really good! :)

Wonderful work; the connection between religion and personal perspective is particularly intriguing.

this is amazing and its so deep too

i hav a ? though.. how long does it take for teen ink to verify an article

cuz its taking a long long time

 

This poem is Lovely

If there was a like button, i would like this.

This poem made me smile. I can see everything happening, and I understand the humming. This is a great poem. :)

I really like this poem. It was interesting. I really like it because it's different than most poems. 

Very intersting. I'm not entirely sure what you're trying to say, and I think that adds to the piece a lot. Excellent work.

This poem should make a lot people look differently to other people.

The poem is so different from others. it makes it better.

the last line was my favorite :)

The flow of this poem really keeps the rader captivated. The rhythm you start out with is wonderful.

this is incredible i love it one of my all time faves.

Woah. i love all the different ways this can be interpreted!

Unforgetable and different!

This is so good. It has a touching personality to it, and it feels like something you should keep with you when you travel.

this reflects such a skill for simplicity and imagrey... i am rarely able to convey so much in such a short piece, and i'm envious. love it.! <3.

Love it! So beautiful!

Wow! This is a very cool poem. Keep writing!

This poem is so creative. I love the imagery. And I love the image choice! I love how it a suburban area and the sky just looks amazing. Keep up the good work! 5 out of 5 most definitely!

This is one of the strongest peoms i have ever heard . It has so much compassion and thought . Bravo ! Bravo ! You deserve all the praise you get . This is beautiful and inspiring !

This is amazing, i love it!
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Good grief,you are talented,style is close to mine!

Mysterious.Very(Hmm.....??).I like it!

jeez...some people are harsh. It's not very often that a poem really speaks to me, but this one I think had a deeper meaning to it. I think that you look beyond what's on the surface, whether you realize it or not...

I really like this poem. A lot, or at least some, of these comments were upset because the man talked about a black god, saying no one knows what color God is. I interpreted your poem as about the personal nature of god; everyone has their own thoughts about god, and the man on the bus expressed his.

I find this piece quite interestin it paints nice picture in my mind and reveals message that is great. Great Job!!! comment on mine plz

I'm sorry but I dont like this very much at all.
Let me start by saying I am open minded and excepting of all people, doesnt matter the gender, race, oreintation, ect.
But.....
I don't understand why you would be intrigued by the ramblings of a man going on about the race of god, the saviour, ect.
No one knows what God actaully looks like, it shouldn't be the face of God that is intriguing, but instead what he is and has done.
Thats whats important.
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this is one of the best poems I've read on here. bravo! I can't describe it with words, it's just too hard. :)

I LOVE THIS POEM IT WAS WONDERFUL.

I love the images you poem brings into my mind. It brings me back into a time when the past was just as interesting as the present. And it was really well written. Awesome stuff

One of the things I really like about this poem is the way it ends so abruptly- like it's drawing a connection to the abrupt end of the man's one sided conversation. In my view, the things that make a poem are good imagery and a good ending, and this poem has both.
Thanks for publishing it!

if this means what i think it means then i love it! this kind of topic is mysterious, but worth thinking about. I love the way you depicted it.

Its so frustrating to me that I cant grasp the meaning of this poem. I've been rereading it for the last 10 minutes and still...nothing. Can you please explain?

this is a very good poem, leaves you hanging on the edge of your seat wondering what exactly is the meaning, what happens in the end. if you have the time check out my poems. i'm new to the site so i could use some constructive criticism.