Corrupt MAG

February 5, 2009
By hello.peaches PLATINUM, Greenfield, Massachusetts
hello.peaches PLATINUM, Greenfield, Massachusetts
26 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"i don't love you as if you were a rose of salt, topaz or arrow of carnations that propagate fire: i love you as one loves certain dark things, secretly, between the shadow and the soul."
-Pablo Neruda


There are knicks in the
girls’ bathroom doorknob
and I imagine someone has
a homicidal obsession
and that is where they count
their “privileged” victims.

In high school they all say
the universe is ours to save.
But we ended up just
shrugging our shoulders

and pinning each other up against the lockers.



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on Dec. 6 2009 at 5:37 pm
DearMissWhite GOLD, Sandy, Utah
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I really like this poem. Its so simple but had so much meaning. I love it.

on Nov. 14 2009 at 10:41 pm
Writedancelove&live GOLD, Redding, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Always forgive your enemies; nothing annoys them so much."
"Karen: If you're from Africa why are you white? Gretchen: Omg Karen, you can't just ask people why they're white."

I love this! Its totally true, which is so sad. Please check out one of my poems, Why do I? Thanks : )

on Nov. 14 2009 at 9:33 pm
alli.babi. SILVER, Pendleton, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
in order to be irreplaceable, one must always be different.--Coco Chanel.

GREAT poem! : ] i really liked it.

on Nov. 5 2009 at 11:28 am
Hayz~Hardcore SILVER, Johnstown, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"peace on earth"

Omg i love it very deep...i absolutly hate highschool so many judgemental people but your poem is amazing...if u could pls check out my stuff and let me know wat u think and rate it for me it would mean soo much too me thank you i can only hope to be as great a writer as u some day

on Sep. 29 2009 at 1:21 pm
That's deep (:

on Jun. 23 2009 at 2:06 am
AudienceofOne BRONZE, Alexandria, Virginia
3 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
I write. Though whether that helps me keep my sanity or makes me lose it I shall never know.

I like your observation of the knicks on the doorknob...it seems like something I would think of. I also think you've truly captured a bit of today's society in the second verse.

on Jun. 16 2009 at 1:04 pm
pinksage33 BRONZE, Woodstock, New York
4 articles 1 photo 211 comments
Great poem!!!

Olivia.G said...
on Jun. 13 2009 at 6:14 am
Olivia.G, Des Moines, Iowa
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wow, i really like this poem in terms of rythm and voice, but i think mabey you might have come on a little too strong with the subject. i respect your work and i think you should keep writing.

Brandi Kim said...
on Jun. 4 2009 at 2:53 pm
Brandi Kim, Sanford, Florida
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interesting the way its put. its sooo true.

on May. 29 2009 at 8:49 pm
HeavenCooley GOLD, Stillwater, Oklahoma
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this is awesome.

high schoool must such ha ha...

-heaven-:P

on May. 26 2009 at 6:12 pm
this is really good, but its kind of awkward, even though it's true. I'm not in highschool yet but i know it does happen.

loVer giRL said...
on May. 24 2009 at 1:24 am
I really liked this. Im getting Ready to go into high school so im nervouse. Keep'em comin!

LilJ<3 GOLD said...
on May. 23 2009 at 5:06 pm
LilJ<3 GOLD, Gloucester, Virginia
11 articles 2 photos 60 comments
very true. great job. High school is a time where we start to discover our inner selves... great job and continue writing..Congrats on being published in the magazine :)

Jackie :)

cvlnst BRONZE said...
on May. 20 2009 at 2:00 am
cvlnst BRONZE, Parkersburg, West Virginia
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This is really good, and so true. High school isn't all it's cracked up to be... (for those entering high school). It isn't as terrible as people say and isn't as great as people say. :)

1breezy said...
on May. 19 2009 at 9:11 pm
great poem...it really told alot

on May. 19 2009 at 8:30 pm
hbwriter SILVER, Chapel Hill, North Carolina
9 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
It's time to trust my instincts, close my eyes, and leap!

nice, and same here MikaLestat. I hope my high school experience isn't like this poem. I really loved the bathroom doorknob part. Nice.

on May. 19 2009 at 3:53 pm
hurting_real_bad SILVER, Conneaut, Ohio
5 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Yes I love him. I love him more than anything else in this world and there is nothing that I would like better than to hold on to him forever. But I know it's not for the best. So no matter how much my heart is going to break, I've got to let him go so he can know just how much I love him. Maybe if I'm lucky, he'll come back, but if not, I can make it through this.”

i like it a lot...:) i turned in some of my own poetry... if it ever makes it on here check it out...thanks and congrats your really good!

Sveta BRONZE said...
on May. 19 2009 at 10:28 am
Sveta BRONZE, Nizhyn, Other
4 articles 0 photos 6 comments
Perfect.

on May. 18 2009 at 6:37 pm
alayapoetgirl BRONZE, St. Louis, Missouri
4 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is hard; but it's harder if you're stupid. -John Wayne

Wow! This really makes me step back and think a little...

on May. 14 2009 at 12:42 am
MariaMarie DIAMOND, Washington Court House, Ohio
70 articles 0 photos 181 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life's a mountain on a beach"-Unknown
"Will: This is either madness or brilliance. Sparrow: It's remarkable how often those two traits coincide."-Pirates of the Caribbean:Curse of the Black Pearl.

Nice message, mysterious.


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