@Guise I appreciate the feedback! The enjambment is purposefully strange, which goes with the "broken utopias" and other images of shattering. However, you are right, TeenInk added a couple of extra line breaks around the picture. "Can" was capitalized because it was the beginning of another sentence, but the sentence started in the middle of the previous sentence. It also emphasized the fear of the speaker, that others are unaware of their plight. "Another" is capitalized to emphasize that the speaker has seen this descent happen before, and can't bear seeing it again. And thank you so much for your lovely comments! I do love me some constructive criticism :)

First off, brilliant how you worked in the title as part of the actual body. The poem itself is utterly unnerving and makes me squirm more than I'd admit. It seems to me like an existential crisis that grates the poet. The imagery is excellent ("sterilized hearts" and "broken utopias" particularly stand out), and the rhythm is rough, fitting the subject matter. It's also interesting how you chose to leave "I" in lowercase, as if to reflect the poet's crushed/crumbling self-confidence. Couple things though: the enjambment struck me as odd and a bit random, but it might be the fault of Teen Ink's formatting. (I have this same issue with my work. It seems Teen Ink inserts line breaks where there ought to be none, and it messes up the poetry.) Also, what's with the capitalization of certain words? "Can" and "Another" don't seem crucial enough to be highlighted like that. Nevertheless, this is great work, and it justly deserved to be published.