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Threads of Hope

July 28, 2015
By Nightingale74 PLATINUM, Beavercreek, Ohio
Nightingale74 PLATINUM, Beavercreek, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"When you need something to believe in, believe in yourself."
"A poem unwritten is only a thought; unshared, unsaid..."


I’ve got a stitch along my arm,
and a patch across my side.
There’s a thread sticking out of my hair,
and a bandaid over my chest.
My body is covered in bandages,
with seams running every which way.
I feel like the stuff that’s inside me,
is seeping out through my tears.
With every single step I take,
comes the fear of falling apart.
But for now, I’m held together
by these few threads of hope.
Hope that I’ll someday find myself
whole and brave and strong once more.
Until that day, I’ll keep walking forward,
finding strength in the peace I’ve sewn together.



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on Sep. 10 2015 at 7:39 pm
PoeticAtheist SILVER, Durham, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"I go to seek a great perhaps."

Well now that I understand you intention, I get it. (my wording is weird...) I feel like it's a great test for readers to see whether or not they really pay attention to what you are saying. (I guess I failed)

on Sep. 9 2015 at 8:17 pm
Nightingale74 PLATINUM, Beavercreek, Ohio
46 articles 0 photos 154 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When you need something to believe in, believe in yourself."
"A poem unwritten is only a thought; unshared, unsaid..."

Thank you :) And I understand your point with the use of the term "stuff," however, I intentionally used that word as a reference to the stuffing one would find inside of a rag doll or scarecrow. There were a few other little word plays that I included in the piece, for example, "seeping out through my tears," refers to both the tears in the narrator's "fabric" as well as the tears that they cry. I would love to still hear your opinion though. Did you notice my play on words, or do you think it was too subtle to really make up for the use of such a boring word?

on Sep. 9 2015 at 5:41 pm
PoeticAtheist SILVER, Durham, North Carolina
7 articles 7 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I go to seek a great perhaps."

As usual, you put forth a beautiful piece. The entire poem is one big hook of captivation. I do have one piece of criticism. There's one line that makes me look back in puzzlement. line 10-11: "I feel like the stuff that’s inside me," the word stuff is what brings me out of a reading trance. I don't know if it was just rushed or something but I feel like if you replaced it with something more descriptive it would have more meaning.


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