May 14, 2015

I look up at the sky
And feel her tears
Fall from her diamond blues

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thrillqueen126This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Feb. 4, 2016 at 9:41 pm
This is short, but it conveys your thoughts perfectly, though leaving a little up to the imagination. I love it!
ThePoeticJustice said...
Jul. 22, 2015 at 11:31 am
it's basically a haiku, there's no need to honestly elaborate. it's a short poem about rain, actually. It's in the eyes of the beholder, good job, avenge
Hanban12 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 20, 2015 at 6:02 pm
I disagree with the other comments. I don't think you need to elaborate with this poem at all; it leaves an amazing resonance and a chance for interpretation from the reader. Leave it how it is, your words create a wonderful message and emotion.
Consalvator This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 29, 2015 at 10:35 am
Simple but eloquent. I love it! Great use of personification. I agree with @Luv4Ever, I felt you could have elaborated because I'm left with questions; but I like that the simplicity allows my mind to fill in the rest of the story which I really enjoy.
Luv4Ever said...
Jun. 7, 2015 at 11:35 am
This piece is beautiful and i love the wording but i feel it is just the start. I wish you had expanded more on what you were trying to say because, as a reader, i am left hanging.
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