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Tears

May 14, 2015
By AvengeMyBrokenSong GOLD, WHOOP, New York
AvengeMyBrokenSong GOLD, WHOOP, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"It takes more strength to cry at mid-defeat."
-Susan Boyle
"The closer you get to the light, the bigger your shadow becomes."
-Kingdom Hearts


Sometimes
I look up at the sky
And feel her tears
Fall from her diamond blues



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on Feb. 4 2016 at 9:41 pm
ThrillQueen126, Seattle, Washington
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This is short, but it conveys your thoughts perfectly, though leaving a little up to the imagination. I love it!

on Jul. 22 2015 at 11:31 am
ThePoeticJustice PLATINUM, Houston, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Hold fast and keep your head up high for life will pass right by you like a speeding bird if you don't acknowledge it- Charles Moorer III (me)

it's basically a haiku, there's no need to honestly elaborate. it's a short poem about rain, actually. It's in the eyes of the beholder, good job, avenge

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on Jul. 20 2015 at 6:02 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 633 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

I disagree with the other comments. I don't think you need to elaborate with this poem at all; it leaves an amazing resonance and a chance for interpretation from the reader. Leave it how it is, your words create a wonderful message and emotion.

on Jun. 29 2015 at 10:35 am
Consalvator BRONZE, South Jordan, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"Once you make a decision, the universe conspires to make it happen." - Ralph Waldo Emerson

Simple but eloquent. I love it! Great use of personification. I agree with @Luv4Ever, I felt you could have elaborated because I'm left with questions; but I like that the simplicity allows my mind to fill in the rest of the story which I really enjoy.

on Jun. 7 2015 at 11:35 am
Luv4Ever SILVER, Jacksonville, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
A miracle is just another name for hard work
-Minho in "To The Beautiful You"

This piece is beautiful and i love the wording but i feel it is just the start. I wish you had expanded more on what you were trying to say because, as a reader, i am left hanging.