Nice Guys

May 11, 2015
By AvengeMyBrokenSong GOLD, WHOOP, New York
AvengeMyBrokenSong GOLD, WHOOP, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"It takes more strength to cry at mid-defeat."
-Susan Boyle
"The closer you get to the light, the bigger your shadow becomes."
-Kingdom Hearts


The hands of time point at me...
How long has it been since you've seen me?
Months ago, in that little cafe,
Now it seems like you're avoiding me.
Where are you? Where's your heart?
Thought I knew where, but I'm falling apart
Without you. Within you, there is an endless sea,
You've gotten in your boat and aimed far away from me.
Why'd you leave me on the shore
Screaming out? Honestly, what for?
The echo of your tenor reverberates in my mind.
"I'm the nice guy", you'd say...
But you left me behind.


The author's comments:

This is a reply to @lazygenius Not My Fault.


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on Aug. 16 2015 at 4:56 pm
PoeticAtheist SILVER, Durham, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"I go to seek a great perhaps."

Well...This poem can be summed up in comparison. It makes me feel as if I am repeatedly climbing up and down mount Everest. All in all, It is a beautiful poem, but I have to agree with @alaina_h and @Luv4Ever. Think about mount Everest. The view on top is spectacular, but the viewers are distracted by the lack of oxygen, which makes your breath...choppy. Didi this make any sense?

on Jul. 4 2015 at 8:09 pm
alaina_h BRONZE, Wilmington, Delaware
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Favorite Quote:
I believe in pink. I believe that laughing is the best calorie burner. I believe in kissing, kissing a lot. I believe in being strong when everything seems to be going wrong. I believe that happy girls are the prettiest girls. -Audrey Hepburn

Wow, I really like this. Usually I subconsciously skip to the "interesting" parts of poems, but I found myself hanging on to every word. If I haddd to give some sort of constructive criticism, I would watch your rhythm. Great poem!

on Jun. 7 2015 at 11:33 am
Luv4Ever SILVER, Jacksonville, Florida
7 articles 0 photos 199 comments

Favorite Quote:
A miracle is just another name for hard work
-Minho in "To The Beautiful You"

I love the feeling behind this piece and what it coveys. however i feel the tempo of the rhythm distracts the reader from the beauty of the poem. I still enjoyed this piece though ^^

on May. 21 2015 at 4:56 pm
ThePoeticJustice PLATINUM, Houston, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Hold fast and keep your head up high for life will pass right by you like a speeding bird if you don't acknowledge it- Charles Moorer III (me)

OH my god, how I cam relate to this one XD ooh lord. Why do they say that nice guys finish last? I have no idea, but it raises a feeling of loneliness inside. Geez. It's a great poem, a bit shorter than I'm used, but everyone has their own styles :) I like it, it's relatable, keep writing

on May. 18 2015 at 7:43 am
AvengeMyBrokenSong GOLD, WHOOP, New York
18 articles 0 photos 83 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It takes more strength to cry at mid-defeat."
-Susan Boyle
"The closer you get to the light, the bigger your shadow becomes."
-Kingdom Hearts

Correction: this is based off of I've Seen the Truth, not Not My Fault.




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