Inferno Locks

March 4, 2015
By simple_effect SILVER, Franklin Park, New Jersey
simple_effect SILVER, Franklin Park, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"Security is a superstition; it does not exist in nature. Life is either one daring adventure or nothing." ~Helen Keller


I would watch out for that ginger if I were you. 

One touch of her hair and you will burn to a crisp. 

Don’t look into her eyes; maybe you’ll turn to stone. 

When she walks into a room, everyone puts on

sunglasses because her inferno locks

might make you go blind.

 

~Then again…~

 

I would learn more about that ginger if I were you. 

One touch of her hair and you would be amazed. 

Look into her eyes; they are just as incredible. 

When she walks into a room, all attention is towards her inferno locks, and no eyes wander.


The author's comments:

This is virtually me.  My red hair is basically the story of my life!


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ellwist SILVER said...
on Aug. 23 2015 at 8:08 am
ellwist SILVER, Surabaya, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"They only let you be this happy when they're preparing to take something from you." -Khaled Hosseini, the Kite Runner.

Solid piece. Really like how it switches in the end. Good job on this one!

Beila BRONZE said...
on Aug. 23 2015 at 1:11 am
Beila BRONZE, Palo Alto, California
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Favorite Quote:
"The coldest winter I ever spent was a summer in San Francisco." -Mark Twain

:D I love this! I like that you begin with the shame cowering its head, yet you end by owning your most distinctive trait, proudly placing it on display. The one thing I would suggest for you to add to the parallel-ism here is to also make the words of each pair of stanzas correlate. I think it would read more smoothly that way, almost like a kind of slant rhyme, and it would also make the unique structure more obvious. As is, though, I already give you props on creativity!

on May. 24 2015 at 3:41 pm
AvengeMyBrokenSong GOLD, WHOOP, New York
18 articles 0 photos 83 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It takes more strength to cry at mid-defeat."
-Susan Boyle
"The closer you get to the light, the bigger your shadow becomes."
-Kingdom Hearts

I love the parallel structure, great job!




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