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Five Blocks MAG

January 11, 2009
By Anonymous

Five blocks from where I lived
Is where I live now
Five blocks from the convict
who was arrested again and again
but always managed to get out of
heavy jail time
Five blocks from the woman
whose belly started swelling
so her husband kicked her out
Five blocks from the little girl
who used to run away from school
Five blocks to the nice painter lady
next door with her jasmine arbor
Five blocks to dogs who lick instead of bite
and never howl all night
Five blocks to a bigger house and nicer neighbors
So little distance
So far away



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on Dec. 31 2012 at 3:31 pm
sadesdd DIAMOND, Elma, Iowa
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I like how you referred to all the people an you kept the original theme up. Good poem.

on Aug. 11 2012 at 3:20 pm
Kay.B.Toys SILVER, Blackstone, Massachusetts
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i love the framing, beautiful poem!

on Apr. 23 2012 at 5:49 pm
Wilson1994 GOLD, Holywood, Other
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Favorite Quote:
'Nothing lasts forever. Forever's a lie. All we have is what's between hello and goodbye.' Unknown

I beautiful use of imagery, a great theme of being so close yet so far from something better, keep posting I really enjoyed this! If anyone could possibly have a wee look at my work I'd be really grateful, criticism is MORE than welcome!

on Apr. 8 2012 at 7:57 pm
writer3499 GOLD, New Bedford, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"it's impossible to live without failing at something, unless you live so cautiously that you might has well not have lived at all-in which case you fail by default."
-J.K.Rowling

Really good and i love that you kept repeating "five blocks" it makes the poem so deep...i love it!!

on Mar. 28 2012 at 11:26 pm
eternal_sunshine SILVER, Minnetonka, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
Laugh, and the world laughs with you;
Weep, and you weep alone.
For the sad old earth must borrow it's mirth,
But has trouble enough of its own.

lovely, very subtly deep

nice job


on Mar. 6 2012 at 3:11 pm
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.
--Eleanor Roosevelt

No criticism. I really liked it~

on Dec. 31 2011 at 12:35 am
Missundrstoodx2, Indianapolis, Indiana
0 articles 11 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You never know what it enough until you know what is more than enough."

There is so much subtle complexity here. You begin with "five blocks from" and end with "five blocks to," where your emotions steer from getting away from a bad place, even if it entailed some good things too. Regardless, your imagery provokes emotion, your diction is wisely selective, and I appreciate the way you appreciate the little things in life, and how this piece came full circle. Nice work

on Dec. 13 2011 at 8:48 pm
WaffleManThing, Vallejo, California
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Favorite Quote:
"just keep swimming..." by dory. :)

could be applied to social gatherings to. like in school and cliques. :)

on Nov. 22 2011 at 9:00 am
Monkee63 SILVER, Independence, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
"I want to feel my life while I'm in it"- Meryl Streep
"Live, Life Love"
"Everybody wants happiness, nobody wants pain, but you can't have a rainbow without a little rain."

I really love this! great job!

 


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on Nov. 19 2011 at 9:45 pm
R.S.H, NY, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Don't let anyone get in your way of becoming who you are meant to be.

WELL this is very beautiful and well written. I love it.

Ayme. said...
on Oct. 4 2011 at 8:23 am
beautiful. sad, but beautiful. makes you wish the rest of the world was like that

on Sep. 11 2011 at 1:35 pm
silentpeacock BRONZE, Whitney, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
all it takes is all youve got

wait now thats weird ur like realy similar to me! click my name and look at my stuff.

on Sep. 11 2011 at 1:32 pm
silentpeacock BRONZE, Whitney, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
all it takes is all youve got

haha omg u have my avatar! eyeballs r my symbol ;*)

on Sep. 5 2011 at 9:14 pm
ZombieDanceWithMe SILVER, Rockford, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
“To die is nothing; but it is terrible not to live”



-Victor Hugo

this is really nice!

kind of sad in parts, but so true. I like it a lot!

 


on Sep. 3 2011 at 6:05 pm
Marzipan_City BRONZE, Rockford, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
Float like a butterfly, sting like a bee - Muhammad Ali

This is really good and makes me feel like that literally 5 blocks away there are dogs that will lick instead of bite

Keep it up!


on Jul. 30 2011 at 12:49 pm
devikaarora GOLD, New Delhi, Hawaii
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Favorite Quote:
Dont tell me sky is the limit when there are footsteps on the moon !

This is so well written.. and this connects so well...

on Jun. 21 2011 at 1:54 pm
tatertot1311 BRONZE, Johnson, Vermont
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Favorite Quote:
"Dance like no one is watching you"

This is amazing! It is such a creative way to express your emotions! I loved it :)

on Jun. 16 2011 at 7:33 pm
apoetssoul SILVER, Lockport, New York
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Favorite Quote:
When you reach the end of your rope, tie a knot in it and hang on. -Thomas Jefferson

This is beautiful and is personally significant for me. I positively admire your ability to express these ideas (if this does not reflect an actual personal experience of yours, you've certainly fooled me..) so beautifully and honestly, yet with such brevity and clarity. I admire this piece and hope to read more of your work in the future, and would be honored if you would look up some of mine sometime (I only have one approved as of yet, but four have been submitted, more are upcoming...). Thank you & God bless! :)

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on May. 16 2011 at 8:58 pm
reblep GOLD, Chester, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
the sun through my window, warming my skin...

all i can say is i love it.

on Apr. 26 2011 at 7:14 pm
Natalie4ya GOLD, Laredo, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"To each his own" "Love is being stupid together"

I Loved it:) Can someone read some of my stuff? I would love to get real feedback from my fellow teeninkers:)