Fire or Ice

January 30, 2015
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If I should ever have a heart to stop,

It would stop its counting beat for you

However the burning desire

To burn your lips with mine of fire

'Cause your icy touch sends a shrill

And sets my nerves alight still

 

The exhilarating rush when your adoring eyes lock mine

still makes my cheeks flame and cower in sublime

 

And if the world should perish not once but twice

Fire or ice

I would face my doom with you at my side and laugh

And I would whisper the final words 'I love you'

And not have to listen to hear you say them too.






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CharleyHeelis said...
Feb. 8, 2016 at 10:53 am
@lyrahelix , firstly , thank you for your comment and also , about your comment on the spelling and grammar, how do you mean? Perhaps I could explain? Thanks xox
 
CharleyHeelis replied...
Feb. 10, 2016 at 5:50 pm
Hiya again @lyrahelix , thanks for your feed back , and looking through I completly understand the spelling mistakes and will edit as soon as possible. as for 'cower in sublime', It is meant to represent the butterfly sensation and the 'gooey' feeling of seeing your love , where as the cower part is there to subtly hint that the person feels beneath or below her/his love , thank you for asking and I am glad that I got the chance to explain , any other quieries please let me know xox
 
lyrahelix said...
Feb. 6, 2016 at 4:04 pm
I love the last para; the spelling/grammar is a bit distracting though
 
CharleyHeelis said...
Nov. 30, 2015 at 8:05 am
Keep commenting and liking , also let me know any book recommendations, poetry recs and anything else and I will let you know what I thought about it xox
 
megggannn said...
Nov. 29, 2015 at 11:00 pm
This was so beautiful, wow, it actually gave me chills reading it. Great work!
 
CharleyHeelis replied...
Nov. 30, 2015 at 7:41 am
Thank you @megggannn, that's really kind! xox
 
wizad said...
Nov. 23, 2015 at 8:48 am
the title remindes me of the poem Fire and Ice heres some of it some say the world will end in fire some say in ice, from what I have tasted of desire i hold with thoes who favior fire, but if it had to parrish twice i think i know enought of hate to say ice is also great
 
CharleyHeelis replied...
Nov. 30, 2015 at 7:42 am
Haha, I actually read that poem shortly after writing this , this poem is based on many things that are similar!
 
wizad replied...
Dec. 4, 2015 at 7:42 am
so is is like a fan poem?
 
CharleyHeelis replied...
Dec. 4, 2015 at 3:32 pm
No it's not x
 
CharleyHeelis said...
Nov. 15, 2015 at 7:49 pm
Hey Guys, not heard much lately... remember to comment if you do/don't like it and why ... any feedback is good feedback also let me know if you want me to check out your work! XOX
 
TinaterrazasThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 5, 2015 at 7:29 pm
Real cool poem btw
 
CharleyHeelis replied...
Oct. 22, 2015 at 1:18 pm
Thanks! @Tinaterrazas xox
 
CharleyHeelis said...
Oct. 3, 2015 at 12:46 pm
Hey guys comment if you want me to check out or like your work :-)
 
TinaterrazasThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Oct. 5, 2015 at 7:28 pm
Please check out my work.
 
CharleyHeelis said...
Sept. 1, 2015 at 11:14 am
Thanks!!!! :-) @KittyKat1419
 
KittyKat1419 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 30, 2015 at 1:33 pm
I enjoyed reading "fire or ice". It is a great poem:) keep up the good work
 
CharleyHeelis replied...
Oct. 22, 2015 at 1:17 pm
Thank you @KittyKat1419
 
CharleyHeelis said...
Jul. 30, 2015 at 4:30 pm
Thank you Hannababexoxox ... thats really nice :-)
 
Macprincess15 said...
Jul. 10, 2015 at 6:18 pm
I adore this. It reminds me of a poem I wrote 7 months ago. The use of the elements such as fire and ice were in mine also. They say a great deal about love and heart break. :) This is great!
 
CharleyHeelis replied...
Jul. 29, 2015 at 4:58 pm
Thank you, that means a lot :)
 
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