Whale Song MAG

January 3, 2009
By Jaden Gragg GOLD, Shawnee, Kansas
Jaden Gragg GOLD, Shawnee, Kansas
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I have never heard it, phantom whale calls,
so deep they make one cringe, so shrill they make one cry,
except before I was born.

I know,
before I developed the lips, eyelashes, fingers, brain,
I have now,
I lived in the ocean,
I floated like a little walnut,
I was the simplest creature,
I heard the whale song.
This makes me wonder,
was it only I who received this gift,
or was it you also?

Giant whales, so big, beyond my comprehension,
peaceful beauties,
we have killed you all.
We stabbed and raped and took
for no good reason.
We took our ships,
I take blame somehow, I feel so awful,
we sharpened sticks and killed your
families
peace
your song traveled across the ocean,
you swam together for centuries through the deep,
mystic water.
What were you saying? Were you speaking through god?
Are you god?
I think we should worship you.
You blinked your eyes slowly, and your tears melted
with the ocean
We drank your blood with greedy slurps.
Are we evolution’s mistake?

I want to learn your song.
My race will never learn,
I am so lost with my race.
If I could trade in my clumsy legs and sharp words,
I would gladly accept your fins and godly
demeanor.



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on Mar. 10 2011 at 5:41 pm
Dragongal BRONZE, Reno, Nevada
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I wish for the same thing at times. Keep writing, this is an amazing piece of work.

on Jan. 3 2011 at 7:54 am
TheContentedWanderer94 GOLD, Tallahassee, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Happiness is as a butterfly which, when pursued, is always beyond our grasp, but which if you will sit down quietly, may alight upon you.
- Nathaniel Hawthorne

Okay, This was truely beautiful! I am also a lover of whales and this was exactly what I thought of them. The best part for me was your phrasing and language. Keep Writing!

on Nov. 20 2010 at 9:41 pm
kneller42 BRONZE, Fayetteville, West Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
In the land of the blind the one eyed man is king
The greatest gift you can give is hope

you words are proof that we are not evolutions mistake  keep going

Lexi-pex GOLD said...
on May. 28 2010 at 12:40 pm
Lexi-pex GOLD, Billingham, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams."
- Eleanor Roosevelt

really, enormously beautiful.

nancy19 said...
on Apr. 14 2010 at 12:12 pm
nancy19, Saugus, Massachusetts
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Good poem. it was different but i liked it

Eric DeMeo said...
on Apr. 14 2010 at 9:09 am
Eric DeMeo, Saugus, Massachusetts
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good poem i like the line when you ask If we are evolutions mistake?

on Mar. 1 2010 at 8:15 pm
scarletP SILVER, East Lansing, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"A smart girl listens but doesn't believe, kisses but doesn't love and leaves before she is left."
-- Marilyn Monroe

it's interesting, when i was sitting by the ocean with my dad he explained the reason we feel so calm near the water is because of the sound of the waves...it's the same sound we hear when we are in the womb. Your words are very true and very deep...I however do not believe that our race was a mistake, we are evil and vile as well as graceful and endearing. Beautiful poem.

BMMSJB said...
on Mar. 1 2010 at 10:36 am
Yes, I completely agree with you. Completely. I am not even a person who is obsessed with saving the environment, but I do believe that we should stop killing whales.

bmmszw said...
on Mar. 1 2010 at 10:35 am
this poem was great good words

BMMSJB said...
on Mar. 1 2010 at 10:34 am
This poem takes me through wonder. I never really thought of the whales before reading this. It does touch my heart. I would have to say though, it could be better, this was constructive, but a little more rhyme/alliteration. But good. Great job.

on Mar. 1 2010 at 9:38 am
annkaykay2011 DIAMOND, Lansing, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"I am who I am, sorry, no changes."

My favorite part

"What were you saying? Were you speaking through god?

Are you god?

I think we should worship you.

You blinked your eyes slowly, and your tears melted

with the ocean

We drank your blood with greedy slurps.

Are we evolution’s mistake?"

Its really deep and very beautiful.

Its calming but its really sad but it makes people think.

Keep it up.=]

on Jan. 10 2010 at 11:41 pm
WriterFanatic PLATINUM, DesMoines, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
A coward is incapable of exhibiting love; it is the prerogative of the brave.
By Gandhi.

Wow. Yeah, sometimes when I see pictures of cut down rainforests and polluted air, I feel the same way. Odd isn't it? How sometimes the greatest stranger is your own kind?

LilBenj SILVER said...
on Dec. 3 2009 at 10:47 pm
LilBenj SILVER, Richfield, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
There is a certain providence in the fall of a sparrow. - Hamlet

This is magnificent. You truly have a mastery over words - at once majestic and gentle.

on Nov. 11 2009 at 5:36 pm
ariwrites94 GOLD, Deltona, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet." ---Plato

Hey, wonderful work!!! this is amazing . . . U write beautifuly so continue writing!!! also plz check out my poem called "Sensitive Am I" and it would be appreciated a comment and a rating, thankx! and keep up the good work!!!

Aleece GOLD said...
on Nov. 11 2009 at 1:36 pm
Aleece GOLD, Marshfield, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"I'm not random, I just have many thoughts!"

This is soooooooooooooo good. I love it! Check out my poem "All grown up" by Aleece

MoyruhJO GOLD said...
on Jul. 20 2009 at 1:40 am
MoyruhJO GOLD, Chesapeake, VA, Virginia
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I really like this, and I'm not usually one for environmental matters, so that's quite a feat :] And I have to say...the voice of God aspect REALLY reminded me of Moby Dick >.<

on Jun. 1 2009 at 1:38 am
SilverDawn GOLD, Burnaby, Other
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When I read the title, I never imagined the poem would be anything as amazing as this. It sounds so quiet but still powerful. Love it! (:

on May. 31 2009 at 11:50 pm
MeghanMichelle GOLD, Hooksett, New Hampshire
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Great poem! You have real talent. Keep writing.

I hate to do this but I want to hear some comments on my poems and how they could be improved so can someone please read them?

on May. 31 2009 at 5:33 pm
this is really good

on May. 31 2009 at 2:40 pm
jesus_saves GOLD, San Antonio, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
You know somethings wrong when you can't share your thoughts with your self.
-Sadie P. Jackson

This is good!!!!! Amazing. but always remember that God is God and he speaks through us and not whales


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