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The Embers of a Fire Dying

October 21, 2014
By Nightingale74 PLATINUM, Beavercreek, Ohio
Nightingale74 PLATINUM, Beavercreek, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"When you need something to believe in, believe in yourself."
"A poem unwritten is only a thought; unshared, unsaid..."


Rolling seas of amber-gold,

Chocolate trunks with scarlet leaves.

Vibrant yellows, flaming oranges

Like the embers of a fire dying.

The winds have changed,

The birds fly south.

For Summer's heat

Has come and gone.

The days are shorter,

The nights are growing.

A cold, crisp Breeze

Nips my nose.

It lifts my hair

And chills my neck.

I close my eyes 

And breathe it in.

Whispers of forgotten warmth,

Fleeting thoughts of green and blue.

A peaceful mem'ry...

A soothing dream...

Cause now I see

Rolling seas of amber-gold,

Chocolate trunks with scarlet leaves.

Vibrant yellows, flaming oranges.

Like the embers of a fire dying.


The author's comments:

In this poem, I tried to capture the beauty of nature as it changes from summer to autumn. I also tried to capture the almost-tangible feeling that is in the air during this particular transitional period.


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on Nov. 18 2014 at 10:15 pm
Nightingale74 PLATINUM, Beavercreek, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"When you need something to believe in, believe in yourself."
"A poem unwritten is only a thought; unshared, unsaid..."

Thank you, Liv!! :D :D

on Nov. 18 2014 at 5:28 pm
Olivia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,
More real than solid earth;
And to these death does not mean decay,
But only another birth"
- Isabella Banks

I really enjoyed the sensual imagery of this piece! Chocolate trunks, scarlet leaves... It makes my heart melt and think of pumpkin pie! I love the essence of warmth and crispness you created in this poem, it was incredible and cozy. Great job, yet again! XD

on Nov. 14 2014 at 8:21 pm
Nightingale74 PLATINUM, Beavercreek, Ohio
46 articles 0 photos 154 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When you need something to believe in, believe in yourself."
"A poem unwritten is only a thought; unshared, unsaid..."

I agree! I don't typically put a whole lot of emphasis on the rythm of my poems, just enough to keep the flow of the poem going. I do, occasionally put a little more effort on certain lines, for example, in this poem, I wanted the two lines "a peaceful mem'ry..." and "a soothing dream..." to have pretty close to the same amount of syllables-- thus the reason why I abbreviated the word "memory" :) But I usually focus first on the thoughts I want to express in a poem, then, if I can, I try to create a nice rythm. But if doing so inhibits me from expressing all my feelings, like you said, then I forget it. Emotion before mechanics! :)

on Nov. 14 2014 at 11:33 am
ansem_unlimited PLATINUM, Frederick, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
Thou may think of me as desired, to idolize or villanize me whichever you may choose. but gaze upon me and thou sall not see the husk of a man! for all my sins and all my bliss, i am anything but hollow
-Ansem_Unlimited

gotcha, gotcha.... i myself have never put that much effort into literary rythme. i figure if rythme is gonna keep you from expressing all of your feelings then it has become nothing but an obstacle. but hey, you know what they say, different strokes for different folks!  

on Nov. 13 2014 at 11:14 am
Nightingale74 PLATINUM, Beavercreek, Ohio
46 articles 0 photos 154 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When you need something to believe in, believe in yourself."
"A poem unwritten is only a thought; unshared, unsaid..."

I spelled it that way to eliminate one of the syllables, for rythmic purposes :)

on Nov. 13 2014 at 8:43 am
ansem_unlimited PLATINUM, Frederick, Maryland
33 articles 0 photos 140 comments

Favorite Quote:
Thou may think of me as desired, to idolize or villanize me whichever you may choose. but gaze upon me and thou sall not see the husk of a man! for all my sins and all my bliss, i am anything but hollow
-Ansem_Unlimited

very serine, but if i may ask, what is the deal with the way you spelled "memory"? was that an accident or am i just being contextually ignorant?


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