Beauty is the Beast MAG

By Bridget Walker, El Dorado, KS

Her skin, butter-cream by day, turns translucent by night.
Her hair, ebony black, shimmers like the night sky
But only to deceive those she encounters
Her lips, stained crimson from her victims
Eyes piercing blue, penetrating those who make contact with them
Her corpse, deemed immaculate by those she lures into her trap
She is the deceiver, the harlot of the hills
But cleverly disguised
The mark of the beast lies in her hands



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on Dec. 9 2011 at 2:11 pm
Luv2WriteNO1 BRONZE, Covington, Louisiana
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Favorite Quote:
Shoot for the moon even if you miss you'll land among the stars

VERY cool! I liked this poem a lot! Feel free to check out some of my writings some time. Keep up the good work!

on Dec. 9 2011 at 8:52 am
ManekiNeko SILVER, Cincinnati, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"It is better to keep your mouth shut and be thought a fool than to open it and prove it to be true."

Your idea is great, but overall it seems unpolished and choppy.

on Dec. 2 2011 at 4:31 pm
Compulsiveshoelace BRONZE, Frederick, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
Whenever you find yourself on the side of the majority, it is time to pause and reflect. -Mark Twain

This is like the classic idea of the lethal siren, exquisite in every conceivable way but evil to the core.  Check out my free verse "Reality's shroud" if you get the chance, thanks!

on Dec. 1 2011 at 7:46 pm
kwoodman821 BRONZE, Old Fort, North Carolina
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This is amazing! it really paints a perfect picture and its so descriptive in its own way. Truly amazing!

on Nov. 28 2011 at 7:54 am
musicidraw PLATINUM, Manton, Michigan
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I love this poem!!! It truelly speaks to me. Keep writing more. You have a gift for poetry.

 

 


byebye said...
on Nov. 27 2011 at 9:23 pm
byebye, Nevermore, Other
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Oh WOW!!!

This is amazing, so rich and full of substance. Just beautiful, it's in my favorites :)

Hope I can get some feedback on my writing pieces, Butterflies and Falling!


on Nov. 24 2011 at 10:32 am
starlightstarbright PLATINUM, Hoffman Estates, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"Some of you may have taken history or civics classes that outlined the freedoms one expects in a democracy. At the heart of those freedoms is choice... With an affirmative choice, all democracy vanishes."

"She is the deciever, the harlot of the hills"

Omigosh, that was beautiful in so many ways. I love how you could put so much emotion into such a short piece.


james14 BRONZE said...
on Nov. 22 2011 at 9:21 am
james14 BRONZE, Charlotte, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Worst excuse for not turning in homework: 'I couldn't find anyone to copy it from'".

Beautiful writing!!! Great job.

on Nov. 17 2011 at 6:55 pm
Your brian? Cool! I want one too!

on Nov. 17 2011 at 10:06 am
MarissaWhitecloud SILVER, Oskaloosa, Iowa
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Your words you used made it just beautiful.

lurein27 said...
on Nov. 14 2011 at 2:43 pm
I thank so also. I love it!!!

on Nov. 13 2011 at 7:28 pm
babyscars SILVER, Los Lunas, New Mexico
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Favorite Quote:
I dont dance just because I'm alive. I am most alive when I dance!

I admire your descriptions of the girl. I loved this! Continue wriiting =]

on Nov. 8 2011 at 4:42 pm
writer101 BRONZE, Shippensburg, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Slowly but shurly.

Love it.The way you use words is amazing you are a very gifted writer.

 


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on Nov. 6 2011 at 8:46 am
jshawts SILVER, Ottawa, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Missing someone gets easier everyday because even though you are one day further from the last time you saw them, you are one day closer to the next time you will."

This is superb :)

on Oct. 26 2011 at 1:57 pm
KristyLynn_TM SILVER, New City, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Beware average women for they will have average love.

You should post this on a Twilight site also.  Nice poem.

Cleo18 said...
on Oct. 26 2011 at 8:28 am
Very Delicious! Beautifully written, and yes the title is the eye catcher. all in all a very great poem. i congratulate you, you seem to be a very gifted writer.

on Oct. 26 2011 at 12:32 am
ustukushii SILVER, Orem, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"If you are a dreamer come in
If you are a dreamer
A wisher, A lier
A hop-er, A pay-er
A magic bean buy-er
If you are a pretender, come
And sit by my fire
For we have some fox-golden tales to spin
come in, come in" - Shel Silverson

Wow... thats all i can say. Its amazing. Thats some good writting.

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If you don't mind could you look at my peom "Beautiful..." and give me some solid addvice on it and/or your opinion on it.


on Oct. 24 2011 at 9:16 am
dia.dreamer GOLD, Kochi, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"I saw an angel in the marble and carved until I set him free." - Michelangelo
"I took a deep breath and listened to the old bray of my heart: I am, I am, I am." - Sylvia Plath

this one is amazing. the title is completely attention-grabbing and the poem is even better!!! beautifully written. I give it to you. :)

could you please read my poems too? thanks!


Lexie96 GOLD said...
on Oct. 21 2011 at 7:29 pm
Lexie96 GOLD, Havana, Illinois
11 articles 0 photos 378 comments

Favorite Quote:
Now Cinderella don't you go to sleep, it's such a bitter form of refuge, oh don't you know the kingdom's under siege, and everbody needs you. - The Killers

I love the title, it caught my attention right away and then your story was very well written. Also very true as to the nature of people... If you could check out my poem and tell me what you think that would be great.

on Oct. 19 2011 at 10:31 pm
Beatifuly written, and deffentiely a rewarding poem. When i read this it makes a million little picture flutter through my brian. Its quite lovely.




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