Beauty is the Beast MAG

By Bridget Walker, El Dorado, KS

Her skin, butter-cream by day, turns translucent by night.
Her hair, ebony black, shimmers like the night sky
But only to deceive those she encounters
Her lips, stained crimson from her victims
Eyes piercing blue, penetrating those who make contact with them
Her corpse, deemed immaculate by those she lures into her trap
She is the deceiver, the harlot of the hills
But cleverly disguised
The mark of the beast lies in her hands



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on Jan. 13 2009 at 3:45 am
wonderful. this reminds me of a black widow...so beautiful, but so destructive and deadly. :0D Great Work!

Pink209er said...
on Jan. 11 2009 at 2:04 am
Very well constructed a well thought out description to allure the reader to step into another mind frame. I love it, and I am very proud of you!

on Jan. 10 2009 at 4:33 am
thank u toasty, (K) that's what i went for, but u and krissy k knew that- being my friends and knowing my writing styles



^_^

and thank you to everyone who commented also

Toasty said...
on Jan. 10 2009 at 4:29 am
I think, to those of you who are focusing on the physical aspect, that she is being metaphorical.


The woman is a user, and drains the life from her men by using them and leaving them, not drinking their blood. She portrayed her as a beast to show her inner self, instead of the outer beauty.

Krissyk777 said...
on Jan. 10 2009 at 3:25 am
Yea This is deff better than that lameo twilight. rockn poem.

on Jan. 10 2009 at 3:22 am
yeah... i wrote this.... NOOOO i don't read twilight....

on Jan. 9 2009 at 1:41 am
AMAZING!!! That is so graphic! I could picture so much in my mind!!! I love it!! Keep up the good work!!!

penguin35 said...
on Jan. 7 2009 at 2:24 pm
To tell you the truth, I am so tired of hearing about vampires! Get over it, people! But it was a very good poem.

jeff's girl said...
on Jan. 3 2009 at 12:58 am
That's so extreme! I seriosly loved it.

Anjagirl said...
on Jan. 2 2009 at 6:27 pm
WOW that poem is tottaly awsome. It is amazing because I've been writing a book lately and well the poem discribes my main character! You are awsome keep doing what your doing

mrm811 said...
on Jan. 1 2009 at 5:01 pm
it was really good. have you read the twilight saga?

Artem said...
on Dec. 27 2008 at 6:37 pm
Wow, I really like this. You did well! I like how you took an every day story, and transformed it into something no one would think of. Good job.

kmc24 said...
on Dec. 27 2008 at 12:58 am
woowwww girl thts deep

i love it!

continue to write, love!(:


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